Inn Cog Neato, a bizarre pony. She can do things that she isn't 'physicaly' (is magic physical?) suppose to be cable of doing. She has done some bad things in her life.
BUT, she makes her first friends at the age of twenty. She has fun.
AND, she learns something... something bad.
WHAT is it? How will Inn react to being harmed by yet another pony? Will she look for revenge? Will she look on the side of friend ship for help? OR, is there something else about to happen?
Author's Note:
I no longer have an editor. Sorry for the poor... everything. If you wish to help the GDocs version is open. Let me know what to fix. And maybe even why... you know so I can learn from it lol.
Chapters (42)
well this sounds interesting, i'll track it and read it when it isn't 1:33 Am.
As this story's editor (Although Translator is probably the more appropriate term), Any Spelling and grammar feedback is much appreciated, as more time was spent making sure the story read well than making sure it was 'correct'.
Sorry for it being a day late lol
I'll go back and do some editing latter XD
Enoy!!
Interesting read, "tracking" and thumbs up
Thanks, just wait for the next few chapters... they're meant to be... interesting
I meant to say this earlier but my mom was using my laptop at the time...
This chapter was named by Mr_Darkboy2010
It's a perfect name for it... and much better than what I had at first
Page Turner told me that it may not be clear that there is something going on here... but saying what it is would spoil stuff.
So, for those who didn't catch on, Inn can do good in a race do to something beyond herself. It's not that she's that good... and if you what a good idea as to when you might see hints of this... It's within three or four chapters, give or take.
That shouldn't be spoilery XD
412381 ProGrammarPoliceTip: You use "where" when you should use "were". All. The. TIME.
please continue this story
me and the editor are trying to find time to edit the rest
i'm done writing it... but for those of you who have seen the errors STILL there...
...
yeah you'd want this edited
Why don't you try running it through Microsoft word? That might help for spelling errors. (DO NOT trust the green grammar squiggly.... It lies.)
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All I have is Open Office and Google Docs... robots are not good enough to edit my writings
I may try and find someone else at some point... but it seems weird to have someone else in PageTuner's place. More so seeing that he's been doing it for this story for about a forth the way through now.
I may ether put up "On Hiatus" until I find a new editor, or upload the rest in hopes that someone will see just how badly I need one (
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Thanks for taking an interest
726729 I like the fic, of course i take interest in it. but you've got to tell your editor to hurry his slow ass up!!!
749543Page Turner is a good editor, but you can't force him. He needs the 'creative mood' to edit and write. He had a story 'On Hiatus' for this reason. The position is kinda open, so if you're a good editor (not that I demand the best, my work just need work) then you can help me out here.
749612 but editing is going through and weeding out the mistakes not writing the damn story!
also im not reliable. i set up a face book once and i haven't checked it for years.
I did the same thing.
And once more, I make lots of mistakes. If you had seen what was wrong in my story Muffin Top (edited six or seven times by me and me alone) think that in larger scale... like nearly 26 to 30 times that length... it's like writng a book all over again
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Oh, yeah, you might have to go and see some of the errors in the comments, where somepony helped me out and used red letters and other means to show my errors. (So you may not see exactly what it's like, but have an idea)
Hurry and update this please.
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I'm going to start bombarding many random editors and see who bites
I might be a bit too busy today, but I'll so it soon
This story, despite its flaws, is excellent and deserves moar likes. I'm loving the dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_plot.png and how Inn's special talent is being a blank slate.
1265398 Yeah I know there's flaws... it's my first story
Anyway it's nice to see someone else that likes it too. I had some... episodically grand ideas for this story, that I'm thinking of dropping. I was going to wright sequel(s), a couple of side stories, and something like a prequel.
It's not likely that I'll be doing those, I'd like to, but I have other stories in mind.
1262489>>1265398
I'm not sure if you are the only two who are liking this story or not... so I've made a blog post for all to see and let me know.
Well, if it's not clear... let me know what you two think
1272375 the story is great! i think it should continue for a long time!
1272416... Did you read the blog
I'm not asking if I should stop the story just how to make the updates
1272428 no I didn't . Why don't you just post one every other day, or something?
1272780 I'm thinking of my old scheduled of uploading on Monday, Wednesday, and Friday (every Friday being a multiple of three, so that I'm sure that I've updated. I have bad memory XP) Would that be okay with you? Waiting a few more days for craply edited chapters.
I've done some pre-editing for the editors, making sure that there wasn't anything I wanted to change, or needed to changed (let alone noticed the need to edit). So I have some done for you, but I like the idea of a buffer. When I started this story, Luna Eclipsed or Sisterhooves Social had recently aired. I had all twelve chapters that are up now written before Heart's Warming Eve. It took me so long to get the story up on fimfiction due to editing.
1274359 its fine! after all it is YOUR story, what ever works for you!
1275784 ...
they both work. In a moment like that, it's whatever makes you as the readers happy
1276146 well i look forward to reading it!
1276193 If I post 13 now and on Wednesday post 14, you'd be happy with that right?
1276498 Very!
yay!
1276804 I take it you just read the chapter.
Did you like it? One thing I've always liked is dark humor, and I try to make you feel a little uncomfortable for laughing, and yet not want to stop at the end of this chapter.
Did I do good?
1276823dude, nothing makes me uncomfortable for laughing anymore. im a veteran of the dark side of the internet!
1277072 Dito
1277081 lol
1277099 As we type, I'm (hopefully) pre-editing Chapter 17.
I am nearly at the halve way point, and in terms of having the story finished, just six more chapters to go.
Let's see how far I can get by the end of the month
1277116 good job! here, have this!google.ca/imgres?imgurl=http://www.helicam.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/07/lighter-chocolate-chip-cookies.jpg&imgrefurl=http://www.helicam.com/our-new-cookies/&h=300&w=400&sz=25&tbnid=fBAm0Xd-g1Sv6M:&tbnh=84&tbnw=112&zoom=1&usg=__CHzboPmJYGAT6mB6lOaUGS3bTws=&docid=r_F9RhvhNU79GM&sa=X&ei=nfhTUMSxNLH4igLZt4DQCA&ved=0CDYQ9QEwBg&dur=4806
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A broken Image image?
Is this the thanks I get for finishing my first run through of Chapter 17 Towered?
1277161>>1265398 Mind playing into my madness, men?
Pick one of the seven options in any order you wish:
Snaping,
Changes,
Foolhardily,
Creation,
Friends,
Lawfulness,
Typical.
Pick them in any order you like
1277184it was supposed to be a cookie...
1277558 Changes, Typical, Creation, Foolhardily, Snaping, Friends', Lawfulness. (i tried to make it into a scentence
1277584 In the I just want a Comment group I said this on a word game
I love cookies
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(some more)
Okay that works. Let's wait and see what medlimakar says
1277604>>1277610both of these are good and it would be amazing if chips ahoy cookies rained down from the sky!
1277558 Alrighty then.cdn.broni.es/images/emotes/mlp-declassy.png Lawfulness Changes Friends, Foolhardily Snaping Typical Creation.
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1277757>>1278603
Changes, Typical, Creation, Foolhardily, Snaping, Friends', Lawfulness.
7 6 5 4 3 2 1
Lawfulness Changes Friends, Foolhardily Snaping Typical Creation
Changes 13
Lawfulness 8
Typical 8
Foolhardily 7
Friends 6
Creation 6
Snapping 5
Have a good day everyone
1279280 why thankyou, good sir! have a mustache for your troubles!
1279329 Thank you very much good sir
1279280 For using your readers to help you with your story without our knowledge or consent, I grant you a muffin button, with a side order of diabetes.
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