Trixie wants revenge, Chyrsalis does too. The mane 6 are in a hell of a lot of trouble with these two angry mares teamed up. But life has a funny way of working out especially when you get help from the most unlikely places.
Note: This takes place BEFORE season three. Trixie hasn't become good. (Sidenote there's been some difficulty with the flow of Chapter two so I'm putting it on hold once the plot holes and things have been taken care of i shall continue)
Thank you so Much Doctor Cobra For proofreading. Thanks for believing in me and getting me to try this out.
Chapters (1)
I like it, a little short, but I like it.
I'm definitely enjoying this little concept of yours! I can't wait to see more of it. You've got a few spelling errors in there (just a very tiny few, as I almost didn't notice them,) but your writing style reminds me very much of comic book material. And that's not a bad thing either; it's a nice change from the norm around here! Oh, and don't worry about this first chapter being slightly on the short side. There's nothing wrong with that! Sometimes a short chapter is what's best needed to kick off a story and introduce your reader's to the plot's hook. All in all, I've enjoyed this little read, and I look forward to seeing more of this story in the future as you continue writing.
Good first chapter, I'll favorite it to see how it goes.
Thank you. All of you, I appreciate the comments. Also lol I'm not used to writing stories. Plus this loosely based of one of my greatest Rps I ever did. We regret not recording it. So its mostly based off my memory. I'm also big on decent dialouge something I'm trying not to over do in the next chapter. But I'll try and be lengthier my mental standpoint is to be effiecent which means less time so I tend to be slighty compact when I write.
Much to fast for that small amount of words