This is a sequel to my story Spread Your Wings and Fly. If you have not read that yet, you will not understand this story so i recommend you read that first.
This is about Rainbow Dash Getting her wings back and learning where she belongs.
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I thought that you wouldn't be able to match the emotion or impact of the last story, seeing as tradgedy leaves a lot of room for such things.
Y'know, at first I was a bit skeptical about this idea
But I must say I was pleasantly surprised!
I love how you portray these characters, and the ongoing story kept me interested! 
it seems quite plausible.
The description and picture of Rainbow's flying mechanism also has me very interested
I also loved the little cupcakes refrence you sneaked in there, you clever colt
W-O-W This was absolutely amazing
The description of Rainbow's "wing" was so awesome. Another great story with an equally great feel just like the first
Truthfully I can't describe how I feel about this. But......AWESOMEAWESOMEAWESOMEAWESOMEAWESOMEAWESOME!!
So... That 'unlimited' magic thing. I have two ideas as to how this works.
1) Twilight either made a component that focuses and stores ambient magic or filed off a bit of her own horn to provide or focus said source of magic.
or
2) Pinkie Pie created a perpetual motion/magic machine and Twilight included it into the device.
305146In my mind, the magic is just a ball of raw power that is anchored down in the device, and the aura stretches to become RD's wing. The magic is tied down in the middle of the device so that it will never leave. Imagine the magic as silly putty. You stick one end on a wall and then pull the other end away from the wall. The putty will stay and the wing will form.
This is really awesome Magiccolt!! I really enjoyed reading this! Please keep making great stories like this!
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Lets start with the plot. It starts off with Twilight and Rainbow Dash in an open field attempting to try out a new machine but resulting in a failure. Short stop at Twilight getting an amazing idea. Continues to Rainbow Dash heading towards Fluttershy's cottage, upon leaving Rainbow Dash runs into Twilight somehow causing her to laugh abnormally loud. Quick hop back to Twilight and her awesome machine making skills showing the readers the gift is complete. Rainbow Dash wakes up and she is greeting by her friends and shown the new found gift that can give her the ability to fly again, but she feels like she does not deserve the gift since she is a lot closer to them now that she cant fly. Eventually they convince her that she has more than earned her right to fly ten times over (Fluttershy made that clear).
First of all i wanted to point out that in the first story she lost both of her wings. Yet here at the start she is only missing one.
The next thing that does not make sense is how Twilight knows how to wield metals and build contraptions. I mean it makes perfect sense that out of the Mane Six she would know how to except you didn't really explain where she learn these set skills.
I enjoyed the cottage scene when you explained the perfect friendship between Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash.
I was confused about what made Twilight being an egghead so funny, i mean sure its funny but you made Rainbow Dash laugh pretty loud.
The next scene with Twilight in her basement was a very good idea but it felt somewhat unfinished. You could have written more about the machine at that part, only describing its looks, saying how it looked sleek and alien like with a soft glowing color emanating from its center. Doing this gives the sense of awe about how bad-ass Twilight is.
One small thing that i noticed is that you wrote...
"She furiously worked into the night welding"
Yet the next morning you did not mention once that she was a bit tired from her staying up late.
Lastly i loved how you made Rainbow Dash feel when she first saw the wings. You always have a way to get me to think differently, i would have assumed she would have taken it the first chance she got but you made it go completely the opposite way. And for that i congratulate you.
And again this...
"The rising sun glowing upon the pegasus as she disappeared into its rays, just where the land meets the sky."
I love how you tied your title of your story within the story itself. Its little things like that that make me squee in excitement.
Bravo and Encore! I highly encourage you (beg perhaps?) to write about Apple Jack next!
319698Well actually, I said that she dislocated her right wing, and that it was popped back into place. However your insight is giving me so much to work with so thank you so much with all of this. I just hope next time, you will have nothing to say about the story because it was perfect. I can also take a hint. I officially declare that my next story will be about Applejack!
Ooh, I really liked this one. Although a steampunk wing would've been pretty cool, the magic one is way better. I particularly liked the line where you equated Dash's flight to wanting to kiss the sky - it just resonates with her personality really well for some reason. Also, now Dash has the best of both worlds - she's grown closer to all of her friends and can fly again, which is even better. Now to see if her new wing can take on a Sonic Rainboom...
Overall, I really enjoyed this - I hope you keep you writing, you've got a knack for it, in my opinion anyway