A fic where show canon stallions become the Elements of Harmony bearers. Shining Armor is sent to Ponyville per the request of Princess Celestia, and is tasked with making friends. This changes Shining Armor's life forever.
At last, it was time for the Crystalling to begin. Shining Armor felt much more confident now that he'd gotten some sleep, and had been groomed.
Right on cue, Cadence came trotting up to her husband, having finished speaking to the crowd that had gathered. "Everything going okay on your end?" She asked him.
Shining nodded. "I think we're ready. I've chosen the honor guard, picked out the purity crystal, and I know exactly who I want to be our crystaller for the ceremony. So, all we need now is..."
"The baby?" Cadence asked, raising an eyebrow.
Shining let out something of a gasp, before he hastily replied. "Oh, yes, yes, of course. I was... just testing you on that one."
"Where is Flurry anyway?" Cadence wondered aloud. "I hope she hasn't gotten lost."
But at that moment, Twilight, Pinkie Pie, and Braeburn all came trotting out, with Flurry safely in tow. "We're here. Sorry if we're a bit late, she absolutely despised taking a bath." Twilight apologized.
"She's a really strong flyer too!" Pinkie added. "Maybe even stronger than Pound Cake!"
"Well, at least we got her all tuckered out before the ceremony. Everythin' should be just fine." Braeburn smiled, as he carefully removed Flurry from Pinkie's grasp and let Twilight use her horn to float Flurry gently over to her parents.
But before anyone else could say or do anything, tears welled up inside Flurry and she began to cry! Perhaps due to her magical abilities, her cries echoed throughout the entire Crystal Empire, and everyone covered their ears! And that wasn't the only thing the crying was accomplishing.
Much to the horror of all present, cracks started to form in the Crystal Heart, and then it shattered into thousands of tiny pieces! Luckily, Flurry's cries ceased a moment later. But everyone took one look at the shattered Crystal Heart and gasped!
No one dared to say a word, until Applejack finally plucked up courage and nervously said. "I'm guessin' that's gonna make it harder to do the Crystallin'. Anypony bring any glue with 'em?"
Meanwhile, Soarin began to shiver. "Say, is it my imagination, or did it suddenly get colder?"
"I was afraid of this," Celestia ominously remarked. "The Crystal Heart is far more crucial to the safety of the Crystal Empire than any of you may realize."
"W-why is that?" Thunderlane gulped, also shivering.
"Remember how I said earlier that the Crystal Heart protects the empire?" Twilight asked, to which all her friends nodded. "Well, now you know what it protects the empire from. The clutches of the Frozen North. Without the Heart, the Crystal Empire's about to be buried in a massive blizzard!"
"Oh man, we're really in it now!" Soarin gulped.
Shining (still holding Flurry, who seemed both surprised and concerned about what had just happened) was just thinking to himself. "We've been in tight situations before, but nothing like this. I wonder if this time, our luck's run out?"
I didn't want Flurry to appear excited about what she did, like in the original episode (which probably didn't do her a lot of favors).
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Hoo-boy. Looks like the mess has hit the fan right now. I mean, yeah, we know things will work out all right in the end, but in the meantime - well, you get the idea.
Anyway, wonderful job on the latest chapter as usual. The exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-ups are all quite well done in the right places. I really like your combination of general episode faithfulness with small, subtle touches to make certain details make more sense.
Anyway, I DO have a possible dialogue idea:
At an appropriate point, somebody of your choice can comment "Celestia, Luna, Shiny, Cadance, Starlight and Twilight have more than enough power between the six of them, with the help of Sunburst's notes, to repair the heart better than new."
Of course, if you DON'T like the dialogue idea, I profusely apologize for wasting your time.
And, also, I once again, will definitely be looking forward to more, but will also respect if I need to be patient.
I honestly hated the idea of Flurry breaking the Crystal Heart from crying. I know babies cry, but the writers could been more creative than that. The idea of adding a baby is ok, but Flurry should have not cried about being separated from Pinkie. i am sure Flurry's parents played as, but the more I think about the whole thing; I realized the The Crystalling is the second worst season premire of the series right behind Celestial Advice. This is only my opinion and people love it they can , but for me it is cringing to watch.
You're right I really wish they could have done more with her having interact with her aunts and maybe baby sits but Hasbro really has a bad reputation of keeping forgetting about the characters