Wow, Spike's time limit sure is small. He came in like, 10 seconds. And why does Filthy have hooves if this is humanized?

Change the cover pic and well talk

A bit rushed but lets see where this goes.

Jesus get a pree-reader

im sorry, I just really didn't like this. you really need a pre-reader.

3619197 I know. I stretched the story out as far as I could.

3619198 Whats wrong with the cover pic, it's human Spike.

3619366 Just shut it. I uploaded this last night, I didn't get time for a pre-reader.

I thought it was alright. A few bumps here and there, but overall pretty good.

3622004 hey it wasn't an insult I'm just saying take your time when uploading stories. if it was a one-shot then that's understandable but this is a chapter story you need a peer-reader for a chapter story

3622521 Oh, ok. I used to get alot of negative reviews for nothing, and I just started making fanfics. I have people for pre-reading, it just takes a while for them to respond.

3621997
It makes me cringe when I se it you could find a better pic than that(with a better looking human spike than that eye sore)

3623391 Hey. You try finding a pic of human Spike that sex related. Then I'll change it.

3623398
I would but thats to much work for a story I don't care about, but obviously you care more than me because you made the story so you do it, and pluse I don't even know what kind of pic you would like, moreover there is a group that you can join and ask a plethora of people to make some cover art for you

i like it i really do but is anthro or humanized

3646972 Humanized

3619197 Oh god. Thanks for pointing that out. Edits made.

Should be everypony, not everybody.

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If this is humanized, then it should have the human tag, not the anthro tag

I don't dislike without stating why, so here goes. The pacing needs some serious work and some of the text is much too colloquial to be typically considered in a literary piece of work. Futhermore, some of the dialouge was uncalled for; for example when Spike calls Silverspoon a slut. There were plenty of ways he could've handled that and random insults are not the way to go, unless you wrote this with the intention to write a trollfic.

"Sorry, Silver Spoon. As much as I want to, I don't date sluts." He said. That sentence was loud enough for all the teens at the counter to hear. Everyone went "Oooooooooh", Applebloom laughed as the statement sank into Silver Spoon's mind. Silver Spoon turned red with embarrassment and anger and left for the far end of the counter.

BURN!

Oh! This too much for me! Hahahahahahaha! I cant breath! Hahahahahahahaahaha! Spike! Check this out! Hahahahahahahaha! He shipped you with applebloom! hahahahahahahaha!

S-silver a slut?! Nah! *sees silver bouncing her boobs towards rumble outside* never mind.

What sort of dream is that

5145693 okay then

5708047 Toasty!

"Ready." Applebloom said. Spike pulled her out and into his car. Spike cranked the ignition and started to drive off. Spike had one goal on his mind. Make Applebloom his. He didn't want to admit it but when the girls at the bar have been hitting on him, it got him wound up. He held it all in, but thinking of Apple Bloom was the trigger. He had already given up on Rarity after that whole dress incident, and he was upset about being single for too long. Now was the time to end it all and seal the deal.

Seriously?! Apparently Rarity goes all kinds of bitch on poor Spike because of an accident, and makes him break his crush on her? What the hell else did she do, say something like 'I would never want to be with some monster that destroys wonderful pieces of fashion art--oh wait, you're a dragon; no wonder'. I wouldn't be surprised if the aformentioned noodle incident is something similar to this.

Either that of the classic scenario where Spike see Rarity with some stallion, (or even a mare, for all the F/F shippers, especially Rarijack shippers) in an obviously romantic situation and he sadly learns for himself that he never stood a chance (YMMV--your method/reason may vary)..