This really could be my finest invention, even better than that Tritanium armor for the night guards I think happily while doing the final touch-ups.
"Mac, apply more pressure to the drawstring." I ordered.
"Ok." He said simply. As he grunts in exertion, I tap the magazine ever so slightly. Finally , the arrow slides into the shaft. "VICTORY!!!" I chanted, while Mac silently nodded. "Mac, load it up while I put on my presentation suit. Maybe a hour later, I exit my "wardrobe" (a pile of clothes) in a suit and Fedora. "Let us roll." I say as Mac starts taking the cart to the Ponyville Mail Center. I quickly fly over while Mac lugs the Giant Crossbow to the building.
When we arrive, I pull Derpy over to talk. "Ditzy, I need this to get to Canterlot quickly and safely. Can you do that if I pay extra?"I ask while Mac eyes me, probably annoyed by the delay.
"Yup, I sure can do" she states.
"Ok Bye!!" I say as I burst out the doors flying as fast as possible to the Ponyville train station.
I hop in after paying my fee, and start looking for somewhere to sit. I see Twilight, and walk over with a curious urge on why she was here too. "Hello Twilight." I say as I sit down beside her. "Oh, hi." She says.
"So..... What brings you to the Canterlot ride?" I ask.
"Oh, I'me seeing my BBBFF." She says cheerfully. "Your...... What?" I ask in a plainly curious voice.
"BBBFF, my BigBrotherBestFriendForever duh." Oh, she's seeing her brother, may as well ask who."And this is......." I say, trailing off.
"Shining Armor, Captain of the Royal guard." (Holy. Bucking. Celestia. Her brother is my Soon-To-Be contractor!!!)My mouth just hangs open, and Twilight looks at me funny. I regain my train of thought and tell her "Really? I'm seeing him too!"
"Huh!" She says in a surprised tone.
"He is going to see my new Invention." I explain.
"Oh, well I could follow you to your Introduction and meet up with him there." She suggests cheerily.
"Umm..... Ok......." I say, not telling her it's a military testing thing. I suppose someone to talk to wouldn't hurt. Right???
again nothing overtly grammatically affensive.
good job 4 stars (you get the fifth star if it's long and good )