Lol the game is afoot lets see how he does : p

ok you had me pretty lost there , i thought for sure it was going to be implied wanting rape time with the tea time stare , but then celestia just wanted cuddles? and then 2 paragraphs later it's back to helpful rape time again?.....
>is confused....

Something about this story leaves a very sour aftertaste in my mouth, and I don't think it's Celestia.

Well it may be. I came into this story expecting it to be the standard rapefic schlock, and was going to skim through it and get a couple cringes out, but after the events of the first chapter, I was thoroughly intrigued and wanted to see how the story developed. The second chapter really bothered me.

Luna's summary executions of those who were too enthusiastic with a fake image of Celestia, without due process or even giving them the chance to defend themselves for what was essentially a thought crime (no one was actually hurt in the dream, except those that Luna killed) came off as incredibly cruel. More than a couple of them thought that they were still in a dream, which they were, but it would have been very believable to say that more than a couple of them thought that this whole situation was just the result of a few too many beers. There really is no reason to believe otherwise; to any normal person, the situation would have been so unbelievable that one's first response would be to convince oneself that it wasn't real.

And then the scene between anon and Tia in chapter two really did not sit well with me. Once they got to talking about the ordeal and anon played his little mind game, he seemed to decipher Tia's inner thoughts with way too much ease. Who is he, Hannibal Lecter? I can not accept that he could distill "please pretend rape me" from her actions. To me, it seemed more like sick rationalizing for his rape in chapter three. Sure it may have turned out that the rape wasn't really rape, but he didn't know about Constance until after he'd sexorcised Tia. He knew that he was essentially going to be raping Tia and not once did he stop to ponder. It's like the characterization at the prologue where he's suffering from inner turmoil just got completely forgotten. How can he be so sure of his analysis that he flat out ignores Tia's pleas for him to stop? .

The concept is interesting, but it just wasn't executed well. Anon ends up coming off like a rape rationalizing prick, no different than those guys who go "But officer, look at the way she was dressed! She was clearly begging for it!" Completely unrelatable.