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6585204 Not gonna lie, I kind of forgot that would happen.
Jesus! 13K for the first chapter!? Damn! I can't even write a full essay!
6585234 I know huh? I don't know why but, writing is incredibly easy to me. It really helps when I need to write papers for english classes.
6585241 Heh heh, I bet! xP
6585214 Sweet! I love this fic! I've been waiting for so long for you to update it!
When's the next update? Also, will you be updating regularly now?
6586674 Okay, so here's the breakdown. I sent chapter two to my editor yesterday, it took him less than a week to finish the first one after I re-sent it to him, his computer was having issues at the time. So I think chapter 2 won't take too long so yeah the updates should be coming in smoothly up until chapter 14 which is about halfway done. I would have finished it by now but school has been getting in the way...a lot.
I just read chapter 1, liked it, put this story under tracking and I checked for any new updates and saw this updated and was like" well 9000 more words to go "
any ways good chapter 
I like the story so far
6597055 Thank you very much! I'm glad to hear that you're enjoying it so far!
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No problem. I like the relestic factor and build up, I don't really like when story's give a character op powers and no trouble
this story's fun ^_^
Ya, I thought the new guest at the end would be zecora
6771404 Hey thanks! I try my best!
6772962 Huh, fun idea, but I've got other plans for her when she finally makes an appearance.
Oh boy, a "seventh elelement of harmony" fanfiction
Ha! There's the plot, Celastia had this planed from the beginning. Shipping Alex and Luna together.
doctor whooves may pop up soon or later cool
6887101 mmmm. And what a nice, juicy like:dislike ratio as well.
I think I'll add one to the latter just for the title alone.
And here goes the insta-forgiveness cliché. Look, the story feels very unrealistic with the character interactions. Alexis' and Applejack's interaction just feels like two cardboard cutouts reading off a script in a forceful manner, compared to Alexis and Scootaloo who felt much more like a real interaction between an extremely stressed teen and an overly rambunctious child (even if it is extremely rushed due to adopting a child after only knowing them for a few hours at most). After reading the part where Alexis and AJ fought (with Alexis being hostile for understandable reasons and AJ being a self-righteous hypocrite) and then the attempt to paint Alexis as if he was in the wrong, I was about to just leave and call it off as a poorly executed story. Alexis has every single right to be angry and hostile to the Mane Six and Celestia after what they did (it would have been an interesting conflict in the story if he was for a long time and the Mane Six and Celestia had to come to terms with the fact that they caused some major permanent harm to a bystander, as well as alienating said bystander, in their rushing to get the seventh element). I can't think of a single reason why I'd even consider being friends with them if I was in Alexis' shoes. They kidnapped me, changed my form, and are now forcing me to fight their battle, all without even apologizing for destroying my life. My response would have been a general "Go fuck yourselves. There's no way I'm going to be friends with you," to all of them. The moment that Alexis yelled at Scootaloo and then shortly later charged off to rescue her, felt like an actual turning point for the quality of the story. It felt like a well done scene and a good shot of how Alexis was growing as a character. However, the moment Alexis told AJ "I'm completely in the wrong for yelling at you for ruining my life, of which the facts do prove that you had a key role" utterly destroyed that feeling. You've got some skill at weaving a story, but you are rushing a lot of things that need to be dragged out in order to make things fit together smoothly and not feel muted.
I'm sorry, but if this is the quality that I have to look forward to from the rest of the story, I'm out. Everything regarding the interactions between characters feel so ham-fisted and forced that it killed all interest in the story itself, and reading the dialogue between the characters felt worse than a grind (if the dialogue was just pointless filler) or a chore (if the dialogue was just poorly written, in the grammar/spelling context). You're still a rookie, so don't get dissuaded. I've pointed out the areas you need to work on, but everything else about the story is solid (as far as I read). Use this as a chance to reflect on what you've written and improve upon it.
6887101 Do you even plan on writing a story?
7596136 Hoooo boy! I am so sorry it has taken me so long to respond, well technically it's been a whole week? Whatever, it's felt so much longer to me, what with school and work. Anyways, I've been meaning to respond for days now and finally I have the time to do so. Thanks for the advice, and I absolutely understand your reasons for disliking the second chapter. The chapter was originally written right when I was beginning this story, so yeah there are many, MANY, issues within it. And when I say beginning of this story, I'm talking about...two years ago? That's when I first released it and hoo boy! You don't want to see that one. But I've been going over the later chapters over and over and have been fixing things, hopefully making them more 'realistic' in a sense. But I won't know until people see them. I'm actually taking two writing classes right now and I am learning a lot and hope to use the knowledge I'm gaining to improve the later chapters in this story. I most likely will have to go back to this one some day though, but right now it's difficult because of my schedule. I knew there was something about that chapter that seemed unsettling to me, thanks for pointing it out!
Hey mate, do you plan on continuing this story?
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Yeah, it has been a while since the last update huh? I'ts been tough finding the drive to work on this story, but I can definitely try and get the next chapter done.
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Alright, cant wait for the next chapter then. Good luck with finding the drive.
Anypony else notice he used magic at least twice already?
sir i beg thee please continue this story it's great and i can't stand to see it die out. also you just don't leave a story on a cliffhanger that's not cool
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Okay, Okay! I hear you! I'm sorry! I've just been very preoccupied! I have this story, I have another one, not MyLittlePony related, that I've been working hard on, digital art projects that I like to post online, starting an online show with friends, and with work and the next semester starting up soon, I'm trying to find the time! I'm sorry it's taking so looong!
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well i didn't mean to sound pushy i just meant that a story this good can't just fade into nonexistence. i didn't mean too be rude.
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Nononono, I don't think you're rude, I mean you're absolutely right. I've just been so busy, and I feel really bad because I know people have been waiting for the next chapter and every day that passes by makes me feel upset about it. I apologize if my response seemed a bit...strong.
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it's no problem i should have taken your feelings into consideration before i posted the first comment. i know that people have lives outside of the internet and that sometimes that it takes priority. i was just saying you should at least post a bolg that tells people that you can't write at the moment because of the events you listed before. and like i said before i look forward to the next chapter when it done and written on this site.
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You're right, I really should make a blog post to update everyone. I guess it has been a very long time after all. Thanks for the support, I really appreciate it.
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no problem like i said a story as good as this one doesn't deserve to fade into obscurity.
*COUGH*VINYL&OCTAVIA*COUGH*
I'm not really sure how I feel about this at the moment, I mean he got turned into a pony...it maybe my opinion but that just feels wrong and kinda gives me the creeps it's something akin to identity death which REALLY gives me the creeps
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*COUGH* Lyra & Bon bon *COUGH*