Twilight Sparkle finds an ancient book in her library about teleportation magic. After an experiement gone wrong she and her friends find themselves in a strange land with new friends and make some new enemies.
She must now try to find a way back to Equestria or face the possibility of being eaten alive by a new threat that lurks in the skies above.
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Picture provided by DJMoonRay.
I am very biased in the real game so any changes such as sides of Stormcloaks or Imperials are already chosen and will not be changed.
Chapters (22)
I love skyrim I have played at least 409 hours of it. I'm very excited to see what you will do. Overall, good chapter :)
Excellent chapter, I felt as if I was there again. Just a thought, I know every shout in the game by heart, but many don't. I suggest putting what the shout does in parenthesis next to it. Ex: FUS RO DAH (unrelenting force,push)
i look forward to reading more
3501191 I do believe Fus Ro Dah is force, balance, and push.
3501717 In their tongue is Dovakinn...Dragonporn
FUS RO DAH
Praise the Lord
Lolicon
Oh my god
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A question, but since I wasn't able to surmise it from the story... what race is the dragonborn?
please dont stop this story ive had enough of good stories stoping before there time came and i dont want this to repete that pattern keep updating my friend
Good story man. I've noticed that you're repeating a character name many times. Use things like, for example: Spike> Baby dragon. Twilight> Lavender pony and so on. And remember that Applejack talks in a different accent, so I recommend using words like: Because> 'cause, you> yer or ya. Good luck with this fic, it looks promising
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Another good chapter, I must admit. To be honest, it felt strange in some way that the heroes of Sovngarde talked in such informal way. And again, be careful and try to find similar words to replace others. Using the same word many times can make your story repetitive and awkward. Also, it seemed to me that your Dragonborn sounded a little arrogant, but that is just my opinion, though. Don't give up, cuz you'll get better as you write.
3503560 individually yes, Fus, ro and da mean separate things, but as one thuum it is known as unrelenting force.
3507151 That is the name of the shout,the shout itself is the individual words.
by the nine huh? well he just went up in my book for not saying "by the eight"
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Misspelling, it is Dragonborn not Dragon, euugh, Dragonporn. Ugh this will attract furries.
most excellent
your using the rank and file nord dragonborn then? just asking cause it's kinda hard to place.
on his entrance you had him avenge a thalmore which would normaly imply a emperial dragonborn which is highly likely not to be a nord however
you just had him say 'by the nine' indicating he recognises talos as a god which a imperial dragonborn shouldn't be doing.
Another great chapter. A tip: Try adding some shyness in Fluttershy's phrases like: "B-but who are you?","W-what?!?". It seemed to me that the mane 6 behaved to the fight with the bandits just too well. Like they came from a peaceful world and find out completely normal a unknown creature taking other's lives. You could add some panic and shock. Just remember that I'm here to help you improve, not to negatively criticize your story. And I recommend using spaces between words when someone is hurt like: "By the Nine... my arm...". Keep up the good work!
i dont really like the idea of a shipping a pony with a human but im not closed to it so carry on
the next chapter should have rainbow dash and she could say something like 20 percent cooler or 10 seconds flat
UP! DATE! CHAPTER!
I like your story, please do continue.
Have twilight go ... she would love to meet the greybeards ... and parthunox
3776254 Paarthurnax*
IF I WERE TO MAKE A WILD GUESS, I'D SAY BARIX IS A WEREWOLF.
ALSO CAPS IS FUN.
3523872 You're on fimfic, there are already all kinds of fucked up on here
I love the idea of this story, but your writing style could use some serious improving: there seems to be a lot of redundancy in a lot of the sentences, like, words that are being used multiple times in short order. Also, personalities (mostly the mane six) don't come out very well and there is some pretty meaningless dialog that the story could easily do without.
Take Twi to the college
i think RD and pinkie pie should visit the dark brotherhood and or the thieves guild
3809339 RD wouldn't do very well with stealing or assassinations.
3803121 Well that's a given
3809972 yea true hmm what about the blades?
3814650 Paarthurnax is alive...what do you think?
I think rainbow should visit the dark brotherhood that would be awesome, or maybe take twilight to the college of winterhold
3523872 i will tell u right now, as a fury myself...i take great insult from that remark...
3814650 Yeah she would definitely be into dragon slaying, most likely shout out "That is awesome!" or some crap. You know how RD is
3816841 There are still Blades left, just not a group of them. And I really hated the fact that you had to kill him just to get the Blades back...
3816841 yea I figured as much so I guess that leaves the companions
3523872 What happened to love and tolerance?
3790082 I'm guessing Vampire.
Rainbow Dash for the next chapter...
3852633 Hehehe... (I think you know)
we can has updates soon, yes?
3899143 Yes I'm sorry for not updating earlier but I will have another one soon.
not the best...but not bad either...on to Winterhold...and bring Twilight this time!
This is off to a great start! The reason I'm reading this is because it fascinated me when I first saw it and it might give me a good opinion on whether to buy Skyrim or not. Awesome work!
So wait, he was betrayed? Or just defeated?
Nice chapter!
Ooh! Some pony bonding eh? Intriguing.
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I second that!
Awesome! That was a close one with the dragon don't ya think?
Anyways, awesome work! 