I've always liked MLP and I'd spend most of my class time writing fanfictions in my notebook, until my brony friend showed me this website.
A DJ always thinking, friends with famous ponies but not feeling famous. Wherever Deci finds herself going, she has a sweet memory to connect with it. She has a lot of friends and loves talking to them, but what can she get out of a morning stroll waiting for time to go by?
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Dear oh dear. Why do people keep forgetting this?
I know this is your first story on this site, and to your credit, I've seen a lot worse from first-time authors. But besides some formatting concerns (you may want to find yourself an editor), there's a big problem here. Your OC launches into her story without even introducing herself to the audience. That is very rude, especially considering I don't know who she is or why I should care about her. Heck, not even the description tells us who she is! Seeing as she's our protagonist, I think a little backstory would be nice, don't you?
That's my only major critique here, because unless this is addressed, I can't make a judgement about the rest of the story.