Alan has been having werid dreams for two months running and has no idea why he been having them. Having no luck in life he gets suddenly transported to Equestria and now has to live in ponyville till he has a chance to return home. But evil forces has suddenly arrived and its up to Alan and the Elements of Harmony to save Equestria.
Takes place after "The Ticket Master".
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Hmm hmm hmm,
*Is walking down the street*
What the?
*Suddenly a portal opens and a human pops through*
.....
.......
Sigh, not again
*Watches the human get up off the ground*
3..
2...
1....
Where am i and whats going on?!?
Aaaaaand......
*Evil forces pop up out of nowhere, keen on destroying Equestria*
Sigh, i hate humans.......
3407266 Yeah, who doesn't?
Yea, moar liek wet dreams about going to Equestria, lol.
A kick in the head from a pony resulting in loss of conscious mean insta-death.
And overall it's the ultra-classical HiE story, with a bland and unrealisitc acting character don't giving a fuck about anything but being THE CHOSEN ONE, able to pull anything from his ass in order to save the world.
You managed to add most of the stupider clichés ( , timberwolves, bucked in the head, coming from a portal, sucky life, chosen one, EVIL !!!! ), without a lick of originality inside.
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Then can I ask how you can just simply knock out a human. Thats what I was going for and I galdly change it just make sense in that regard
3510788
Unicorn guard using a stun or sleep spell ?
Or a Pegasi guard using a net to capture the character ? Or using a special cloud like a Taser to subdue him ( brutal, but efficient ) ?
Or an Earth pony guard wrestling the character and subduing him ( and the exhaustion can finish him off ) ?
Or the character manage to flee, but drop from exhaustion or blood loss ( if you want to wound him ), or fall in a cold river and suffer from hypothermia after being retrieved later by guards.
You don't have to make the character unconscious, dunno why every authors want to knock the MC off at the start of every story.
3510950
I liked thoes ideas and I simply forgot that he was facing off unicorns. Thanks for letting me know I simply change his KO with a sleep spell.
3510974
A sleep spell seems way better if you want the MC to help the ponies realisticaly. Because after having your skull broken by a pony, I doubt you'll be eager to help them this fast. I know I'm going to hold a grudge against something that tried to kill me in the past.