After his previous battle in The Wolf Temple, Henry, a Brony Werewolf, decides to live life like he always did, but then, he stumbles upon a portal to Equestria. After Entering, he discovers that his previous enemy is now back, and if he doesn't do something to stop him, and SOON, he will end up destroying the Peace and Harmony in all of Equestria.
Beware! This is my first story and was written when I was very young, so it might not be that good... Although if you want to read a likely bad fanfic story, don't worry because I've left it untouched! ;)
Chapters (7)
You should probably refine your spelling and grammar before publishing a story. There's groups full of people who would be willing to pre-read and edit for you. Also, rather than have five small chapters, condense them into one, or better yet, make the chapters longer themselves without having to merge them.
People judge a book by a cover. You'll want to proof-read your descriptions – or better, get someone else to help you proof-read your descriptions – pretty soon. Look around for a few of the groups that offer editing help and make yourself known, and they can help you out.
3325119Sorry, but I swear the spelling is fine, but I'm not sure about the grammar, after all, this is my first story, but I'll look over it tomorrow. Thanks for the Honest Comment!
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The grammar really needs help. The spelling is acceptable. People can overlook spelling mistakes if it's a good story, but it has to really grab their attention. However, no matter how good the premise, bad grammar will kill it. No exceptions.
3328325After overlooking the book I can see the grammar is TERRIBLE, so I will fix it.
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The first step to improvement is admitting your faults. Good work. Willingness to improve sets you apart from other writers that have bad grammar and just don't care, or worse, deny it. Good luck.
A little bit rushed but you do good
3360755Thanks!
it will be better once i fix it though.
Erherm, that was a fast chapter
Well, that escalated quickly.
4322994 Eh, that's what happens when you write short chapters.
What will happen?
Find out in the thrilling conclusion!
Insert Chapter name here
Yeah... I'm probably not going to end up finishing this.
Though I might read it on my own sometime to see what the hell I was doing back then.
Let's hope future stories will be better than this! I am going to be making a game someday so I gotta get better at my writing eventually
Side note: Thanks for the kind words some people gave in the comments, I'll keep the advice in mind!... Even if it's been five years...