• Member Since 30th Jul, 2012
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ONWARD_Conwardicus


Just a writer of MLP looking for some good feedback. Nothing like "Good job" But what others did and didn't like. Anyway, have a nice day!

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Aegis is one of those protected children. Living in a box, given non-toxic crayons, and getting care from his mother. Twenty years later, he leaves his box for the first time to go to the Rainbow Factory. He likes it there enough. Guard rails so you don't fall, a fully operated sauna, and he gets to teach the workers there a lot about what he learned from Mom.

They keep complaining about broken knives as well. They try to show me how to use a knife, and then it breaks. He just wants to find a bottle of hand sanitizer.

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I think your parents really ought to have gone the 'non toxic crayons' route...

This is very amusing and doesn't deserve all the downvotes. I don't think you handled the point of view shift near the end properly, but that's the only complaint I have.

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