• Member Since 27th Aug, 2013
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OrangeDJ


I am an artist, A writer, a webcomic maker, and an avid RP'er. 16 yr old black dude , I have a tumblr but its nsfw, so you'll have to PM me if ur intereste in that, Cya ~

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This is A HIE story, Contains a few OC's this is an alternate universe , Pony's visiting our universe ( there isn't alot of this but it is in there). Also contains babies with nukes AKA; Children playing with godpowers. ( in this story people are aware of MLP FIM, but as i subscribe to the parellel universe theory i figure somewhere out there is an MLP universe) Contains alot of fighting, a small amount of profanity. Some canon characters will get in relationships that are not canon, ages are tweaked a bit, and contains hints at sec between OC's and regular characters, along with some that are in universe. Humans stay human, and all ponies and dragons are anthro .~

An 18 year old boy finds himself stuck in Equestria, after having died and been brought back in a new body, only to discover that this was his original form, 600 years ago ! However another such person managed to come through at the exact same time he did. Both of them granted incredible god-powers, but one of them has to die in order for the other one to live, and one of them holds the destiny of destroying all of Equestria. Hopefully our hero can figure out the prophecy. Maybe if he actually believed the prophecy things wouldn't be so hard on him, but can a person really fight their destiny?

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 16 )
Comment posted by OrangeDJ deleted Aug 28th, 2013

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I have no idea what that means ~:applejackunsure:

Im more indecisive whether to ask for more or not like a orphan kid getting a handout from the mob.

I personally like the premise, but the formatting, grammar, and occasionally spelling errors are quite difficult to deal with. I think should you fix up your story to where it's not quite an eyesore, it could end up being quite popular.

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I actually didnt upload it like that, I really don't know what happened there:twilightoops:, but without you saying something, i probably wouldn't have re read it as quick and lost potential followers. Thanks !

....FIX THE ERRORS! FIX THE GODDAMN ERRORS! IT'S WHAT'S MAKING YOUR RATINGS GO DOWN!

I repeat my previous post, along with this statement.

The awkwardness in the story, tells us readers that you are inexperienced and need to work on quite a few things before we truly would want to read this story. I'll point out one such problem. The ease of access of which your character learns to fly. No. No one believes you learn to fly right away. IXNAY!

oh SHIT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:pinkiegasp: luuuunnnnnaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!!!!!:fluttercry:

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