A drought strikes Ponyville, leaving Sweet Apple Acres dry. Mac needs to provide for the family, and heads down south to Appaloosa. There he meets his cousin Braeburn, where he works to provide his family with money. But, as things are wont to do on the frontier, Mac gets himself involved in a little more excitement than he had hoped for.
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Don't quite have Mac's way of speaking down - he'd try and avoid talking whenever he could get away with it, I'd say - but otherwise he feels about right. Particularly the bit with Brae asking about the other Apples, reminded me of myself not so long ago.
3565387 Um, no thanks. I would actually considered writing a sex scene into the story, but only if it were plot relevant.
Please, not gay story...
Interesting. I will wait for the next chapter.
3567496 I didn't noticed there any gay hints. So you can relax and read
3565387 You so damn wrong...
P.S. You should add to the story Mane 6 or CMC tag because story about some background characters and OC's... Well, very few people will be interested.
3567496 Nope. I know what you're thinking, a story with Braeburn and Big Macintosh with the romance and sex tags. But, at least as much as I have ideas for right now, there's no gay shipping.
3567683 You know what, you've convinced me. I've been considering doing a clopfic for a while, I might just write one seperate of this. No idea how good I'll be at it, but I'll give it a try. No clop in this fic though.
3567683 Why they are necessary ? Dont you think that to write about gay-relationships in a fandom where 95 % characters are female it is just moveton ?
Honestly, i am very indifferent to the gay fanfics as long as there is no Big Mac. He is my favourite male's character in the fandom and I simply fly into a rage when he is turn into the gay. In other cases, I am absolutely tolerant.
3567705 Please, not Big Mac ship. I beg you!
Did somepony drug Big Mac's food? We gonna see some of that sex tag next chapter? Is Big Mac going to do the right thing and get together with Fluttershy at the end?
3569283 Maybe.
Today Big Mac learns a valuable lesson, never take thousands of bits with him when getting laid.
3567782 I have no idea if it would be Big Macintosh or not. It'll take me a while to get a plotline down anyway, and I've got this to do first anyway. (Whoops somehow posted this 3 times.)
Hopefully i'll be able to keep this 1 a day pace up, but I'll probably stop on weekends. We'll see.
The part with her putting a gun to the guy's head could have used some sort of intensifying text so it doesn't just immediately switch to 'she isn't gonna do it' before we have time to worry.
It's hard to put my finger on the issue, but I'd say the dialogue is good but needs flavor text sandwiching it to establish scenes more solidly, both in terms of mental imagery and emotions.
3577553 Thanks for the advice. I've added a bit more to that scene, and I'll probably add more soon.
Sorry about the continually shorter chapters, I'm not meaning to, I promise! I just happen to end it where I feel is right. Also woo 50 views!
Well, shucks, we got us a classic Vegas adventure here! A pretty gal who turns out to be a thief, a night of wild indiscretion that ruins everything, and the looming prospect of abject poverty for everypony Mac cares about!
Good times.
That's pretty high-and-mighty talk coming from the mare who recently seduced, robbed, and pulled a gun on an innocent farmer.
He's more than you deserve, you snake.
Don't fall for it, Mac! She wants to know where she knows an easy fleece in case more of her relatives get held for ransom!
Well, this is the kind of thing you can expect if you're going to go sniffing after mares that rob you, big guy.
Attaboy, Mac. You mind your business like a champ.