What would it be like to see in Fluttershy's dreams? A field of flowers? A trek of wildlife having a happy time? A picnic for her friends? Yes, that sounds like Fluttershy's dreams alright...
...But not all is what it seems, as her dreams take a dark, and twisted, turn.
AN: This is another short fic I made out of some small spare time. I just want the readers to know: I did this for fun and curiosity. So please, don't be upset with what you read. I hope yall can give an honest opinion about it. Thank you.
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I'm speechless... And not in a good way. For the objective view, this was a good, if not creepy, piece of writing. I did not see any grammatical errors, and it definitely got the point across. There were a few 'good' visuals, and the story will definitely leave a lasting impression. Now for the subjective view. You are a sick bastard, I have no idea how you could ever get an idea like this and I do not want to know. You make me sad, and you made Fluttershy sad. That's illegal you know. God would smite you if he read this... abomination. Having said that, I now need to watch an Episode of My Little Pony, probably the Cutie Mark Chronicles, to get the awful scariness of this story out of my head. Good day sir, I SAID GOOD DAY!!!
While I give a thumbs up, it is for the writing. The writing is good, what you wrote about is not. Now, please if I could read about a good dream she has with nothing bad in it I would be a very happy boy.
Misleading title is misleading... Still worth a thumbs up.
245842 Bro I wish I could show you this pic I found of Jesus holding and petting Fluttershy... It is glorious!
I liked it, but I'm just a weirdo
dry humping trees really
ending made me shudder
Goosebumps, nice. At least that's what I thought of after reading.
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I just looked up "Jeesus petting fluttershy" Thank you for that, that picture makes me extremely happy and is now my desktop background.
Before reading: That must be nice, Fluttershy's dreams.
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Well done, you managed to give me a cliff hanger ending AND a fairly nice scare at what the fuck Angel bunny is. Though that was about on par with Moon Diary, well done at chilling me to the bone.
Overall I give it a 4.5/5.
Organization: is well done and is easy to flow throughout the entire story. Considering the end, it chilled me out even more and that had to be the most interesting thing... dark turns are always nice.
Ideas: were... disturbing, to say the least, but very well displayed.
Spelling mistakes: Nein.
Conventions: Well done and easily made out. Helped organization for the most part. Over all a quite scary story.
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Honestly that made the story for me. Seeing as I haven't been scared of anything since i watched the Exorcist when i was three.
All she needs now is SAXTON HALE! and that bunny and everything else like it, is as good as dead.
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Good job SIR,,, you did marverlous, seriously WTF am I reading?
well my good sir, you have done a bang up job in writing a damn fine story. A few grammar problems, but great story line and effects, the ending could have been a little bit less scarring but what's done is done right?
"Several trees were dryhumping one another" .....funniest....mental.....image.....ever
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*Hasn't read story yet. Sees this comment.*
Well now I gotta read it...
I did a reading of this. I hope you don't mind.