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In the 31st Century, humankind has spread to thousands of planets in the Inner Sphere. Once united under the glorious banner of the Star League, the Successor States and their noble houses now fight bitter wars over the scraps of empire. When a JumpShip carrying a special task force from the Federated Suns suffers a catastrophic misjump, the occupants find themselves stranded above a strange, beautiful world at once alien and eerily familiar.

Meanwhile, in the peaceful realm of Equestria, Ponyville’s resident bookworm , Twilight Sparkle, has stumbled upon hints of a secret buried for centuries. A secret that may lay bare long-forgotten aspects of Pony history and culture.

Our story begins on the planet Valexa, where the beleaguered Militia has launched a last-ditch effort to call for help against overwhelming odds.

Written with those who are not familiar with the BattleTech/MechWarrior universe in mind.

First Published
11th Jul 2011
Last Modified
28th Jul 2011
#1 · 168w, 20h ago · · · Epilogue ·

At first I was like :rainbowhuh:

But now i'm all like :pinkiehappy:

#2 · 163w, 6d ago · · · Epilogue ·

Ill have to admit I skipped the beginning chapters to where the two faction met :twilightsheepish: but it jsut got better and better.

I haven't seen mech warrior in years all I could thing about are memories of reading old PC gaming magazines that showcased the first games.

This was an awesome ride and everything turned out perfect! :yay:

#3 · 161w, 2d ago · · · Epilogue ·

It was long to read and a bit slow on the beginnng, but hey, 'mechs take a bit to heat. Great story two thumbs up ^_^

#4 · 155w, 4d ago · · · Epilogue ·

Omigosh! JUST 4.6 stars? It's a crime against the whole humanity (not to mention the entire Equestria)!!!

This ABSOLUTELY, BREATHTAKINGLY *EPIC* STORY truly, honestly deserves 5.0 stars!!!

Even if you hate human-in-equestria sci-fi stories, GIVE THIS ONE A CHANCE! Yes, it is that good.

I do not know, if it is the best one I have ever read (a close tie with The Past Sins) but nevertheless it is an EXCELLENT fanfic, truly deserving a sequel.

(pleeeeeeeease Dashukta :fluttershysad:. Maybe a tiny teaser or a mini-chapter :). Pretty please). How about making Twilight sad for what she asked for before the end of the story and try to come up with a better solution [I do not want to give any spoilers so I won't be writing about any details].

#5 · 153w, 3d ago · · · Epilogue ·

I will not lie...i literaly cried with joy as soon as i read the words 'inner sphere'.

My two things i love most in this world, brought together

THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

#6 · 152w, 2d ago · · · Epilogue ·

This is one of the best Human in Equestria fic's ever made.

Congratulations.

#7 · 141w, 6d ago · · · Epilogue ·

awsome

#8 · 141w, 19h ago · · · Epilogue ·

I was supposed to have favourited this last year :rainbowhuh:

#9 · 140w, 2d ago · · · Epilogue ·

I loved this story on EQD and I love it here!:heart:

#10 · 139w, 3d ago · · · Epilogue ·

I will say that i indeed loved this story it was fun and unbelievably detailed.  Great job I hope you make more stories.:pinkiehappy:

#11 · 139w, 1d ago · · · Epilogue ·

Mechwarrior..........mlp...............................................................................THERE IS A GOD!!!!!!!!!!!:pinkiecrazy::pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy:

#12 · 137w, 6d ago · · · Epilogue ·

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww yeah, that was 2½ hours well spent.

#13 · 135w, 3d ago · · · Epilogue ·

So, I just booted MechWarrior 4 Merc. back up for the first time in years the other day. And here I was, scrolling along Fimfiction.net when "Inner Sphere" jumps out at me. Not familiar with Mech Warrior lore that much, and dont know squat about BattleTech, but this looks good.

#14 · 135w, 2d ago · · · First Contact ·

LOL!! (( take us to your Leader!!)) I love it :rainbowkiss:

#15 · 133w, 4d ago · · · Epilogue ·

It would be nice if you would a the Human tag to the story so the it can more accurately be searched for.

This is one of the few pony stories involving humans I have liked. :twilightsmile:

#16 · 132w, 1d ago · · · Epilogue ·

This... fanfic... is... absolutely... GREAT! :rainbowkiss:

I read it with truly pleasure. The only element that I don't like is that sick xenophobia and hypocrisy of Celestia. Peace and harmony in my ass, troll! This is the reason why your nation is steeped in stagnation.

Anyway, I love this story and want sequel so much :fluttercry:

#17 · 131w, 5d ago · · · Epilogue ·

This was the first FiM story I ever read, back in July 2011. If it hadn't been on EqD's front page the one day I went there on a whim, I would never have discovered ponies. It will always have a special place in my heart.

Now, how about that sequel? :pinkiesmile:

#18 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Epilogue ·

>>449646 Pretty please, Dashukta. Just one tiny teaser for the new, even more EPIC sequel! PLEASE :fluttershysad::pinkiehappy:

#19 · 128w, 3d ago · · · Epilogue ·

I, too, would love to see a sequel to this fic. :)

#20 · 122w, 4d ago · · · Epilogue ·

I don't know a thing about BattleTech, and I still found this a very good and easy to follow story. The first contact scenes in particular have never been bettered in any other fanfic I've read.

#21 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Epilogue ·

Most Hie fics and crossovers are a pox on the fandom.

This is a very, very pleasant surprise.

#22 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Epilogue ·

i liked it. not much else to say for this story

#23 · 115w, 5d ago · · · Epilogue ·

I'll admit when I saw this fic, I was a little apprehensive. I thought "BattleTech and MLP:FIM? Those two get along as well as Sulfuric acid and water." Yet somehow you made it work, you crazy bastard.:rainbowlaugh:

5/5 Would read again

#24 · 114w, 5d ago · 1 · · Comic Books and Aliens ·

At first I was a bit impatient on how it meanders in describing the basic settings and characters we clearly know. That it should move on.

But the further I read, I've started to become accustomed to the pace. Seeing that you went through such deep detail of the outside world, that to speed things up would be imbalanced and look suddenly like it's neglected proper detail.

So it took me two chapters, but I figured out your pace of the story and am liking how it unfolds.

#25 · 113w, 1d ago · · · First Contact ·

Why am I not surprised Fluttershy is the one who tries to interact with the 'aliens' first <laughs> and yes, I agree with RanDT1, Take us to your leader! Priceless!

#26 · 113w, 1d ago · · · The Voyage South ·

I must say, I enjoyed this chapter. Well written, and the disposition between the ponies and soldiers was quite heartfelt. Very well done!

Liz? Nah, she is being framed. I would bet on it.

#28 · 113w, 1d ago · · · Pursuit ·

Remind me never to anger Twi... :twilightangry2:

#29 · 113w, 1d ago · · · Epilogue ·

Quite the enjoyable story. Thank you for sharing.

#30 · 111w, 4d ago · · · Hammers and Teacups ·

Interesting... I had not considered these things when watching the show. Awesome observations, Twilight. :pinkiesmile:

That sounds like something out of an Ace Attorney game, for some reason. Ironically, Ace Attorney never had to deal with examinations of specific design choices of everyday objects, as far as I know. :rainbowlaugh: Besides the Ladder/Stepladder running gag... It makes sense in context.

Sounds like Twilight discovered an incoming DropShip... That is, if that is the DropShip. :moustache:

Pinkie is smarter than her eccentricity lets on, apparently. I like that. :pinkiehappy:

#32 · 111w, 4d ago · · · Princess Celestia ·

Princess Celestia has raised some good points, ironically putting up some points on both sides.

Given humanity's track-record, I'm on her side. Still, I'm surprised she knows so much about us just from a visit from the Thessalonica.

#33 · 111w, 4d ago · · 1 · The Voyage South ·

I'm in agreement with Paladin here. I'm liking how the examinations of human and pony cultures and natures play out.

#34 · 111w, 4d ago · · · A Voice from the Past ·

:pinkiegasp: Twilight actually swore!

... Huh. I guess hanging around certain people can cause things to rub off on you. Between ponies and humans who understand eachother, with them both being sentient, that's no exception. :rainbowderp:

#35 · 111w, 4d ago · · · Pursuit ·

Holy... She's really taken a level, hasn't she? :derpyderp1:

#36 · 111w, 4d ago · · · Epilogue ·

This is totally worth a second read!

When I have the time, of course. :twilightsheepish:

#38 · 108w, 1d ago · 1 · · Epilogue ·

This is incredibly good. How can this be so good? I am simply amazed. I clicked on this with a grim determination to see how horribly mangled two of my favorite fandoms could become...

When I saw the lede, I told my wife "Oh god, I hate this idea, but I have to see how bad it's going to be."  And then I found some of the best BattleTech writing in that first chapter, hands down.  And I've read a LOT of Battletech- I still have the entire original series of novels on my phone.  I've read classic fanfics (The Four Horsemen, anyone?) and TROs and even some Dark Age novels.  None of them can beat your technical writing or pacing.

"Ugh, the technical writing is great, I don't want to read the pony chapters now, they're going to suck." I said to the wife.  And then I read a chapter that sounds like it could be storyboarded into a stock-standard FiM episode. Characters, descriptions of book illustrations... all DEAD-ON. I salute the way you have faithfully recreated the characters of the Mane 6- lately I've despaired at finding an accurate representation of the cheerful nature of Rainbow Dash or Twilight, let alone Pinkie Pie. Most recent fics I've read flatten them to one- or two-dimensional parodies of the actual complex canon characters. Thank you especially for giving Pinkie the opportunity to be thoughtful instead of just random, for making Dash lighthearted as well as boastful, and Twilight insightful instead of just factual.

But the crowning achievement?  The way you treated the differences between human and poni culture and the inevitable clashes between them without getting grim, using magical hand-waving, or having characters conveniently ignore crucial differences.  I expected it to be jarring, but... the meeting and eventual merger of the cultures was outstanding.  

I.. I'm sort of at a loss for words.  My mind, it is full of buck.  *Jackie Chan head*  :rainbowhuh:

#39 · 107w, 5d ago · · · Epilogue ·

Now, wait a minute... According to Sarna.net, the Valkyrie is one of the Unseen 'Mechs.

What inspired the use of one of those? :rainbowlaugh: Don't get me wrong, though; it's awesome, just the same. In fact, knowing that actually increases the awesome levels a bit, at least in my opinion.

#40 · 107w, 4d ago · · · Epilogue ·

Faved.

Nice thing to note that a light 'mech outside of a mech-on-mech brawl is actually more than a match for light forces.

#41 · 103w, 5d ago · · · Epilogue ·

I had just come across my old Battle Tech figures a few days ago.  Great read going into my favorites, thanks a lot!

She's being framed... if the person was good enough to set the bomb off in the 1st place I'm going to guess the next step would be to put blame onto someone else... such as planting evidence... and I like Liz... sooo JAIL BREAK!

#43 · 103w, 1d ago · · · Separate Ways ·

I love da end to this chapter! :twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

#44 · 103w, 1d ago · · · Epilogue ·

It was a little slow for me in the beginning... but I'm thinking that's mostly to do with the fact that a lot of the sci-fi jargon/sciency stuff usually goes way over my head. However, once I got past that (and more on the ground stuff) I felt it moved at a wonderful pace and I really enjoyed it. :twilightsmile::twilightsmile: Thank you for writing it and posting. :3

Sus
#45 · 102w, 3d ago · · · Epilogue ·

An engaging and well-written story, all in all. Especially the parts explaining the weirdness of human paraphernalia in Ponyverse. I also enjoyed the ponies' discussion on the usual Sci-Fi clichés like rubber suit aliens. Plus, I think you've captured the weirdness of human-pony encounters pretty well for both sides. The prospect of a JumpShip being able to force a mis-jump into Equestria does sound all kinds of unnerving, though... I'd hate to see the grimdark of the Mech Warrior 'verse to pour out into everybody's favorite sugar bowl. :applejackunsure:

#46 · 102w, 1d ago · · · Princess Celestia ·

>>1203734

I know this is a little late and that I should probably read the rest of the stories before commenting, but I think Celestia is very ooc here. She is usually very over-trusting, and humans have been nothing but nice . On a kind-of-related note, Fuck Ackerman, he's a dick

#47 · 102w, 1d ago · · · Epilogue ·

>>1573440

Celestia and humans have history in this fiction. Not a nice one, at that.

As for Ackerman... Well, yeah. I'm not even gonna try to defend him.

#48 · 101w, 4d ago · · · Epilogue ·

Yes! BattleTech and ponies! I read it and I love it. :pinkiehappy:

#49 · 101w, 4d ago · · · Epilogue ·

>> OnederMan

I think that I agree with Akamia.

#50 · 100w, 1d ago · · · Epilogue ·

Well, I just finished reading through this story, and i have to say that I was pleasantly surprised.

Even though I have never even heard of battletech, I was able to follow everything that was going on. Well done on the information front!

And, since this is a HiE fic, there were the usual situations that occur. (Human harming creature, ancient human connections, etc.)

However, I felt that you made your story into one that can stand apart from most other HiE fics in its quality, and general feel.

For me, the major problem of this story was what I felt to be some ponies being out-of-character, mostly due to Celestia, and the whole "Ah he just killed someone. No it was self defense. Oh ok." Basically, I felt that the mixed reactions of the different ponies to the humans and their actions was a little odd.

But on the whole, this was one the best HiE stories I've seen. (It helps a lot that I don't think it was a self-insert, and if it was, it didn't seem like one.)

I give it a really good 8/10, because you managed to pull of HiE well. I hope that you might writer another story sometime, because I think that you sure have the talent for it!

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