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I wait with bated breath for the next chapter good sirs.
I...
i will consider it
What the...?
I...
It...
Hm.
~Skeeter The Lurker
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Oh it's just a comedy you skeptics. Roll with and have fun with it.
So, ah, what happened to the next chapter?
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I never said I didn't like it.
Hell, I'd have never commented if I didn't. Or fave.
~Skeeter The Lurker
2964472 Posting it tomorrow
If this gets featured I'm going to quit writing for a bit.
No offense.
It's just a silly little idea spun off from an overused one, which I'm not saying this is bad, I like it, I just want originality.
2964576 I don't know if it'll get featured or not, but it's a real shame since I had such big plans for it too.
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Oh geez, if you want to talk about overused how about main cast pairings? This has been done a handful of times, and most of those WERE also main cast pairings!
What happened to originality and writing going hand in hand, when did status quo become both the rule and the exception?
Hiya, Alex. I'm reviewing your story on behalf of the Good Grammar Directory, a comprehensive list of grammatically-correct stories on Fimfiction.
It could use some work, although it's mostly little stuff.
When you're using that construction, it needs a hyphen between the two words.
Why does it switch into present tense just for this paragraph? You could just as easily write it as "Despite these feelings, the dancer soldiered on, etc."
This isn't a grammar issue, but I'm confused by this. Ponies usually don't wear anything. Or is that different in your fic?
I have literally no idea why there's an "If" at the beginning of this sentence. It works better without it.
"Perhaps even more so than before" isn't a complete sentence by itself. The clauses, therefore, should be separated by a colon, not a semicolon.
This is more of a semantic error, but technically, bits are money. "Dollars and bits," perhaps?
I mean, I know American dollars are the only real kind of money, but the Canadians get offended when we say that for some reason.
Again, it needs a hyphen between the two.
Grammar issues aside, I do have to say that I'm kinda impressed by the premise of this story. A human story that doesn't have a 22 year-old brony as a protagonist? WHAT IS THIS SORCERY
Hmmmm not gonna like it yet, but I'll still read the next chapter. It's an interesting idea I just hope it is done right, no offense.
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We like standing apart from the rest as much as possible.
Still! Originality alone doesn't make a good story, nor does it get said story noticed. This one's a bust it seems. Oh well.
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Heh, probably won't get 'done' now, at all. But rest assured it *was* going to be done right.
They were gonna bond, and fight, and dance and do pony stuff and everything.
Congratulations; this story has good enough grammar to be included in the Good Grammar Directory, a comprehensive list of grammatically-correct stories on Fimfiction.
This is certainly interesting. I love stories with original ideas like this, and although it took me a bit to figure out the main character was human and not an anthro pony I think this could be a really good story.
Ya got my like so I hope you update soon
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Booyah!
So...is this dead?
3544370 I wouldn't say that it's dead, but I took about a two month hiatus on everything I wrote, ending last Monday. Since I'm back, I'm going to focus on a few other things first, but this story is definitely not dead. I've just been away is all.
Is this story going to get an update...?
So...if anyone happens to find this, here's chapter 2. There are no more.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1RnViKn5dWEfAPhy8jHHKNc1dF-JvZTHM9b1g0EW0PrY/edit?usp=sharing