Two lives from two different worlds encounter the same orb at the same time that will throw their normal lives upside down. They now have to adapt to each other lives and keep this from those they know around them.
Will they be able to fool their friends and family till they both find a way to return to their true bodies and worlds? Or is there a greater work involved with this?
Note: I made some changes to the summary to see if this fixes any of the problems that spoke of. I am unsure if it has, if not tell me where I am going wrong
Note 2: The story is now completed, this was a one off story with no continuing, no connection to any of my stories that in progress still. I just did this out of pure randomness and within a few weeks. I know the grammar and such is out of context in some places and people reading it get easily distracted but sometimes just ignore it and read the story lol. Life too short to just complain about grammar.
The story was a random idea and wasn't really taking things seriously to be truthful. Well I leave you all to read this if you wish. And I am going back to my primary stories that in progress, the ones I really enjoy making. ^_^
Well this is completed and closed. Enjoy reading it!
Interesting
How does this have only one comment (two now, with me)? Strange.
3265530 not a clue, my stories hardly get any comments or feed back, the only feedback i get are from the ratings.
3265865 Add it to groups like you see with other stories. Those help out a true lot. As long as you place the story in the right groups and the right categories of those groups.
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What group you think this be good to submit into? or how do I do it? ^^;
3294994 Basically what I always do, is looking for groups that has similarities with the story I have. There is almost a group of everything. Either it be within the specific idea, or the general one. Just join one and drop the story in there. However make sure you read the rules before you join, don't want to get on anybody's bad side, do we?
3265865
Here's some feedback: it's never a good sign when your story description starts off with a run-on sentence. I expect the same minimalist approach to puncuation in the actual story, so I'm going to do us both a favor and not read it.
3296461 that isn't really a fair comment at all. It would be grateful if you told me a way to improve the summary not be cold as ice and say something like that.
Your feedback has nothing that explains to change or improve upon it... So you say run-on sentence but what exactly do you mean by it? Is the summary lacking something or is it when I put too much into the summary?
And as a very old saying goes 'never judge a book by it cover'
So help me here and tell me where I gone wrong with the summary
3296742
A run-on sentence is one that contains numerous clauses that should be separated into their own sentences, or, at the very least, should be separated from each other with appropriate punctuation -- just as I have done here.
3296931 I think I get what you mean, I done some changes to the summary just now and wondering if improved or I need to make some more changes to it
3296955
That's a definite improvement; well done. Regarding improvement in a more general sense, the best suggestion I can give to anyone is to read as much as you can. Read for enjoyment, yes, but also think of each book and every story as a potential lesson on grammar, punctuation, and word flow.
3296968 very true and thanks for the help
Is Rainbow Dash confused that he's pronouncing z zed? I think this is my favourite chapter so far!
