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Electuroo


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A famous stunt dare devil and a thief that leaves money at places he breaks into, what is the connection between the two and why both deceed on Ponyville? And does Rainbow Dash and Flutteryshy know who this thief really is? (one shot chapter story)

I made this story seem like it was part of a episode, it was something I thought up and decided to create lol.

Also my character reflects some of the differculties I had in real life with bullying (which continues by groups of pointless teens and young adults mostly when I am at work or on the streets when they notice me -_-)

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Comments ( 8 )

Alt. Title: The Thief And The Rainbow Dash/Fluttershy

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Doesn't sound right. I'll keep the title as it is, thank you anyway.

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So you liked the story?:rainbowhuh:

I like it, very nice, keeps to the theme of the show.
I could honestly see this as an episode. Well done. Only one thing bugged me:
Rainbow Dash smirked looking to each of them “How about it for all time sack?”
just a small error, but shouldn't it be sake?:scootangel:

Other than that, a wonderful addition to my favourites. If you didn't already know, I normally favourite everything I bring myself to read. Heck if it worth reading, it's gotta be good right? And I still haven't found anything that disapoints... yet...:trixieshiftright:

4244349 glad you like the chapter and done the change to the word too :rainbowdetermined2:

Very nice, Mr Electuroo. This is a delightfully sweet little story with an engaging plotline and a wonderful resolution. It fit well with the message and style of the source material, I could definitely imagine it as an episode.

Of course there are small errors with grammar and the occasional spelling mistake, but I know you are already aware of these, so there is little point in me going much further into that.

Overall an enjoyable short story.

Comment posted by Ogvexx104 deleted Jun 16th, 2021
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