A unicorn by the name of Keen Eye has traveled far and wide to find a place to start his life. He decides to settle in Ponyville and open his very own magic shop to teach magic and sell magical items and books. Sure, a few things are alittle off about him. He wears black tinted goggles all the time, has a hard time understanding colors, and doesn't let anyone touch his personal collection of books, for ANY reason. But with such a gentle colt, he must have his reasons, right? No harm in keeping a few secrets. At least until those secrets and history comes back to find him.
Chapters (12)
niceeeee!
Nice work, I like it!
Huh story is much tooo obvious. But i gonna give it a try, maybe you will surprise me
that's weird story
This story have good potential. I will follow it, to see where it go.
i wonder what the changeling tag means and where the shipping goes. is Keen a changeling or is he the son of one? And will there be a single ship (Keen and one of the 3) or Keen with all 3 of them?
2928694 All in due time, very sadly you asked all the questions I can't answer, or else it might ruin the story, but at the very least that I can tell you is that the changling tag will make sense in later chapters, but everything will come together in the future. Unlike my other stories, I wanted to make a story series where it gets people guessing and I throw in a few things here and there so that in the end your like "OMG
I should have seen that coming!" this is my first time ever to try to make one of those kinds of stories, so I guess you can say this is an experiment, I hope you guys continue with the story to figure out what is gonna happen next 
2928825 I know that you cant spoil anything and that i have to wait for the next chapters.
(WHY! *sob*).
2928897 I understand, but I promise you that more chapters are on their way, and I will do my very best to make the ending worth it for you, I can not promise success, but I am gonna get as close as I can to it, you have my word, cross my heart, hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye
2928917 The best ending i can think of would be when he gets all 3 mares.
2928939 playa playa huh?
hahaha, but you will see what happens, I hope I can give you a good guessing game till then, I hope to see you and anyone else reading this little chain thingy in the future chapters, see ya 
I actually found quite a few grammarical mistakes, but since I'm on my ipod, its harder for me to edit. I'll give a few I found.
"Oh, sorry, I sorta got carried away with a thought, I'm alright." Twilight replied,. even thou it wasn't quite the truth.
The comma bettween "Oh" and "sorry" shouldn't be there.
After "I'm alright" it should be a comma, not a period (I used to make that mistake too).
After "replied" it should be just a comma.
The "thou" should be a "though".
There are more mistakes throughout the story. I suggest reading through it and fixing the mistakes and such. Just a heads up.
I really like this story so far, its got a good misterious touch and the style of this chapter was cool. Personally shipping Keen with Dash a bit. Also thinking Keen is a changeling, but who knows. Anything could happen •3•.
Quick note: K-9
My mind is shouting Doctor Who XD
Also, in the 3rd chapter when Keen explained his observation, it reminded me so much of Sherlock.
I wonder if your doing this on purpose.XD
2944230 now I guess this is where I flip out at you, since that is normally someone's reaction for being critisized (idk how to spell that word) and I know I am not supposed to pick favorites here, but you are my new favorite viewer, I was about to say fan but it didn't see that so I will say viewer. But thank you so much, normally people point out things like "oh crap, I forgot to put a period there" or "Crud, I forgot to capitalize there" but you actually pointed out things I didn't even know. "thou" should be a "though"? I didn't know that!
The comma between "Oh" and "sorry" shouldn't be there? Wow I have been doing that since I first started writing .
After "I'm alright" it should be a comma, not a period? I have been doing it wrong all this time. 
All this time I have been making these mistakes and thought I was doing it right. Now I see I have some reprogramming to do 
Old habits die hard, so it may take some time. But thank you so so much for telling me all of this! Now I hope I can make my stories better 
Also to reply to your quick notes, I have only seen 6 episodes of Doctor Who, so I do not understand that reference, and about chapter 3, I did that on purpose, but it also has it's own meaning behind it. Read carefully is all I will say, thank's again for your help, I hope you enjoy my stories, and I hope to see you in the future chapters
wait? is Keen blind or something... if he isn't blind then what is wrong with him/ what happened to him all those years ago?
2953159 odd how you assumed he was blind, what made you think he was? just wondering, and do not worry, everything will be told in the future chapters ahead
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Sorry, when i was reading i had to leave and when i got back i accidently skipped a sentence and it made it sound like he was was blind. My bad.
2953454 oh, I see, now I can't say that he isn't blind cuss the purpose of this story is to keep people guessing, but I also can not agree with you. so I can not say yes or no to your theory, but you are more than welcome to think and assume what you want, I was just trying to understand why you thought that
2946309 I certainly will be continueing this story, and if I like the ending then I'll probably follow or watch, whatever this site uses (im a bit new on the account, still figuring this out and such). And the period change to comma after "I'm alright", that was always something I did wrong until I began looking closely at other people's writing. I'm still trying to perfect my grammar myself and I spell things wrong all the time (thank god for the magic of spell check).
The K-9 thing is from an episode in season 2. K-9's a metal dog. XD
2961535 oh, I promise there is not metal dogs here then, that I can promise you, and it is understandable, it takes awhile to change something you have been doing most of your life
Yep you are sooooooooooooo dead
2965230 I am confused, am I in trouble for something?
nice chapter, Is it bad that I read keen eyes lines in sort of an accent? dunno why but whenever I read it it sounds sort of accented in my head
2968681 Well he speaks like a gentlecolt, so picture him as a fancy sort of pony
2971281 well when do you think the next chapter is?
2990366 I'm visiting family so I will be gonna for a week, sorry, as soon as I get back I will pick up work again, I promise
2994024 ok
2994024 so how was the visit
Just what? They act like they have freaking heat or something. Totally OOC like now.
i liked it a lot
3078902 yea, to be honest, I believe that I showed a bit to much feelings, I do apologize but like I said, this whole series is an experiment. My mistake has been noted thou, so I will try not to make that same mistake again, I was simply trying to show that they were starting to have strong feelings for him
just spelling and the second not so sure
3117509 thank you very much, my spell and grammar check didn't pick that up, how odd, thank you for telling me, I will fix it ASAP! I feel so silly making such a mistake
a filly is a female foal, a colt is a male foal. Snips is a male ergo he is a colt not a filly
3151558 Aha, I knew it! My friend told me that a foal was a baby pony, but I felt that was wrong but he knows more than me, I am so glad you told me this my friend, thank you very much, I will fix this ASAP then
3151570 great story mask
3151570
nice chapter TROLLOLOLOL
Personally, I thought he just had extremely good low-light vision and the light would hurt/blind him.
I'm not so much a fan of Deus Ex Machina though, but nice story nevertheless.
3216517 I didn't even think about Deus ex there, but a good point, I am glad you enjoyed the story, I think you may have had the closest guess so far that I have heard
3216532 kind of wished like it would have ended with all 6 fighting over keen then to make a sequel
3217169 Naw, I do not like that idea all too much. I like one faithful partner and all six of them fighting over him would make him a little too much of a player. The reason they even felt like they loved him was because of his sonar spell being active all the time. With out his horn, he will never be able to cast that spell or any spell.
3218763 but horns grow so it would grow back aswell wouldn't the effects end as soon as they were out of range?
3221351 it did, but since it would happen near him, they assumed that they where in love. Also, in most stance, the horn would grow back, but the horn was cut off, and at the end broken off. It would only heal over, not fully recover. If you were to cut off your finger, the wound would simply heal over, not grow back.
You have some problems with your and you're. I also noticed that you write 'thou' and not 'though', you might want to read through your chapters and fix that.
EDIT: Okay, you tend to miss the last letters in some words like used(which turns into use), also, gentleman is one word therefore gentlecolt(which is a ponyfied word) is also one word. You also missed some capital letters.
3227758 THANK YOU! This is what I have been begging for for so long. . . THANK YOU!!!! If you don't mind, can you spread your wonderful criticism though out my stories, that would be completely amazing, thank you for finally talking about my story like this, means a lot to me, also sentence structure guidance would be great too, I'm sorry, I am so pumped that some one is finally saying more than just "great series" and "Love it" I love you right now (no homo) I hope you were still able to enjoy the story either way and thank you for your criticism
3228096 nice chapter for no music, aswel no homo would be more like no man because homo means man but homosexuality means love of man or gay as some people call it
3237444 An old saying that I grew up around, sorry. What do you mean nice chapter for no music? I am fairly sure that I listed the songs that I listened to while writing the chapter
wow, that fight scene was really cool! first time reading a fight scene
This was an interesting chapter, not your best one but pretty good, I liked that switching from pony to pony thing and how they were kinda completing each other's sentences
Still some spelling and grammar mistakes, but you are getting better with it, still a good job, Snails wanting to learn magic though, this should be good