(THIS IS CURRENTLY UNDERGOING A RE-WRITE TO MAKE THE STORY BETTER. SHOULD YOU CHOOSE TO READ ON, YOU MAY FIND THAT ANY CHAPTER MAY BE DIFFERENT IN THE FUTURE, AND YOU WILL MISS IMPORTANT POINTS IN THE STORY IF THAT OCCURS. READ AT YOUR OWN RISK)
Snowi is a mare who lives on the street, travelling from town to town, trying to survive. One day, she is caught for thievery and sent to jail. Now, after almost a year in the big house, she is free and searching for her cutie mark once again. However, she will find something more than a cutie mark on her adventure.
*Takes place right after "The Crystal Empire". That means Discord is still in stone and Twilight is still wingless. So remember this as you read the story*
Chapters (7)
you really don't need to update so quickly!
great first story by the way
also advice: join a group, you'll get noticed way more!
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Useful comment, yay! Also, I update so quickly because I like writing stories, it's kinda a hobby. However, this story already had the five chapters beforehand. It was previously being written on deviantART, but I decided to bring it here.
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yes but see when you update it shows your story in the updated area, so the most you normally want to update is once a day, it'll help get it noticed more
2924424 That's as much as I do anyways, but good to know I shouldn't do more
The monster sounds kinda like "The Rake"
3105062 Haven't heard of it, sorry.
3105333 The Rake is similar to Slender Man in a way. But it tends to follow and track people, making them feel un easy and have nightmares.
3105389 Well, this one's giving an entire town nightmares. You know what? Since that idea from earlier was good enough, I'm gonna take this off hiatus and work on it. The epilogue for The Butterfly Effect isn't that long anyways, I can finish it relatively quickly.
3105400 Glad I could help.
If ya need more help or suggestions just let me know and I'll see what I can come up with.
Just noticed I forgot to Favorite this one.
3111625 :D
Sly little Filly Scout.
Pretty good story though, interesting with the AJ statue.
If it really was a statue. 
The clustering of dialog is still there, but that's minor, I like the story (normally I don't go for OC, but this I ne seems well thought and not just rambling jibberish). I like the backround and the blank-flank issue seems promising. :-)
3258940 Clustering of dialogue? Don't know what you mean by that, but it my just be my bad memory.
I think "a little bit" is a little vague, considering only a few minutes of dialog have passed. Other than tha and a couple ' and " swaps, I think that this chapter was great! Haha
Haha great!
In this space, try having a boarder or something to signify the change in setting, like these *** ♥♥♥ ♡♡♡ ~~~ === ◇◇◇ ◆◆◆
Great job! The Apples' accents are hard for many people to get right!!! I salute you!
3259389 Not completely sure how to do that kind of stuff, but I guess I'll try to figure it out.
I guess it's easier for me since I live in the south. I generally know what people like (we call 'em rednecks) sound like.
just a tiny little typo, just thought it worth mentioning. Great job with the characters!!! Pinkie Pie, Applebloom all of them!!! ( a little more character in scoots and sweety belle though? Not to bad, however I felt like their dialog was kind of...trite...)
3259528 Thank you
! I did put a bit of effort into their dialogue, though I never really thought it was good, just necessary to keep the story from sounding bad.
Nice, I felt that the walk with twi didn't make much sense, was she restless and then decided to walk? Or what?
Also...
Just a tiny error, and the and made it seem like you rushed in order to add Applejack's attack (?). Also, when I opened up the story, it sent me to chapter 7, so, after reading the first paragraph, I kinda saw Applejack being involved that way coming.
... I think that it's kind of an awkward sentence... its cool that you know pinkie's and rarity's names, however without flutter's and applejack's (if they even have more to their names?) RD also seems kind of...unefected...by her encounter... also snowi and spike both kind of seem unconcerned about RD...nothing awful though...juxt a bit choppy...
When they came to Fluttershy's cottage, they found her outside playing with some ducks. When they asked her to come, she just said yes and sent the ducks back to their pond. Next, they went to Rarity's boutique to find that she was still asleep. When they woke her up and asked her to follow, she said she needed some time to fix herself up before going out. The other three ended up sitting in the living room for and hour before she came out. Finally, they headed for Sweet Apple Acres.This whole paragraph was vague...