This story is a sequel to Regret
From the author of 'I Am Octavia' and 'Regret', I bring you the threequel in the next series, I Fall in Fall. (As usual, you don't have to read the others to read this one, although you may understand more in-depth.)
A change of events, a change in lifestyle. As life progresses for Vinyl and Octavia, one learns the simplicity of life, and one has to treasure what she already has. Among these stepping stones to life, a teal mare pays more than just a visit, and a paparazzi goes all out to wreck their relationship.
The question is, why? And how does one cope when they can't get problems to go away?
The answer is music. Music is the key to everything.
Much thanks to Luminary, Runcible Spoon and Raaron for proofreading / pre-reading / editing it for me, and much thanks to the Singapore Brony Society and SPARKLE for tolerating with so much BS I threw at them, only to scrap them all.
P.S. If I miss you out, I SINCERELY APOLOGISE D: Please PM me if I did forget about you though.
I'm intrigued by that paparazzi....
..... Got my eyes on her 
!!
And I hope that Octavia won't make a mistake with Lyra
Ah, it grew up so fast.
I remember the first draft.
One thing that seems to have escaped the notice of the others:
Plural, should be singular.
2901425 Whoops. Fixed
Hey Spoony, I saw you edited your comment :3
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Huh?
Where?
Edit?
Couldn't be.
Nope.
You must be seeing things.
Well that was certainly a heartwarming chapter.
Good work so far!
I DEMAND ANOTHER!!
If you want
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Name of story: I Fall in Fall.
Spelling/ grammar score out of 10: Lookin' good. Very few mistakes, so here, have a 9 out of 10.
Pros:
-Smart references to music in the narrative! I'm no music maestro (if only I were knowledgeable enough to get the chord references!) but it's clear you've gone the extra mile to throw in some musical similes and metaphors. Imo, this added flair and uniqueness to the story.
-Fluffy and adorable as a newborn kitten. I d'awed at your well-written romance, even for a ship I'm very unfamiliar with.
-You've got good grammar all round, sound spelling, and solid characterisation.
Cons:
-I'm so proud of myself. I'm usually poor at finding SPAG mistakes, but I think I may have landed on a few. I'll let you know about em' in my notes below.
-You know the whole show don't tell rule? I'm no expert on it myself, but I think there may have been a few instances in your narrative when you could have swapped telling us something for showing it. I'll stick one of those instances in the notes below
-Gah, is there a third? I don't think so...any other criticisms would be purely subjective. I could argue that Lyra didn't get much characterisation, and seemed oddly abrupt when she spoke, but then again, you've got more chapters to flesh her out, and I'm sure you've got a handle on that.
Notes:
Spelling/grammar issues:
-first paragraph of second scene- Vinyl changes gender! XD 'Vinyl's eyes flickered open to bright light and a pair of purple eyes staring at him'
-second scene, you've written 'other's mare's' instead of 'other mare's'
-third scene, Vinyl finishes Octavia's sentence, "Vinyl, we talked about the bits issue. It's okay, what's mine is-" with, "Your's" instead of, "Yours"
An example of a show vs. tell moment:
-'The news dropped Octavia's mood. She frowned and her shoulders dropped.' The sentence in red writing, I think, would be regarded as 'telling'. The two sentences put together seem odd, because the first tells the reader how Octavia feels, and the second then shows it by describing her behavior. Instead, you could have just shown her reacting to the news: 'Upon hearing the news, she frowned and her shoulder dropped.' and we'd infer that the news dropped her mood.
I've only left you one example, because actually, you do this very rarely throughout the story. From what I've read, it seems you naturally show more than tell in your writing anyways, so it's just something to keep in mind to save time. It's not a serious issue and it doesn't detract from the entertainment value of this fic. It would only be a serious issue if it were done constantly, and in great excess, as it is in some fics.
Whoo, well, overall, I really enjoyed reading this, especially since it's one of the first Vinyl/ Octavia fics I've dared to delve into. I can see you have more, and I'm not sure if those are in the AHA folders, but I'll try and check them out if I have time! I also eagerly await the resolution to the cliffhanger at the end of the chapter!
I hope this review was somewhat helpful! :)
After finally finishing this entire trilogy all i have to say is, Wow. These fics here haven't yet tugged at my feelz like a musician pulling at the strings of her guitar so much that it elicited tears from the windows to my soul but had i read them in the mood i was in two days ago it surely would have. But i digress anyways these three fics are all great and this one needs another chapter and you will write it i demand it of you! All joking aside i highly enjoyed these fics and i hope you pop out more chapters or maybe even a... Quadrupeal? Anyways have a good day and never stop writing.