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Twilight and her friends are leaving for a week-long vacation, leaving Ponyville in the very capable hooves of Lyra and Bon-Bon.
What's the worst that could happen?
Written for the February Write-Off.
First dark story I've ever really enjoyed reading. Hilarious.
Great twist, and it was very dark at times. Still, it was pretty funny, and at this point the only thing that would have made it better is everything ending in complete disaster -- zombie apocalypse, Ponyville in ruins, mushroom clouds in the distance, dogs and cats living together, Lauren Faust shunning MLP, the works -- and then when Lyra and Bon-Bon are sitting on a bench looking at the destruction with stunned faces, and then some human like Captain John J. Sheridan or William Churchill saunters on in, gives a rousing pep talk, and then leaves. Bon-Bon just grows even more stunned while Lyra's face gets stuck in a grin . . . On second thought: nah. It's fine the way it is.
Keep up the fine work, sir.
That was great man! I really like how you included the letter to the princess at the end.
Quite a few punctuation errors, one or two spelling mistakes, and one or two cases of repetition (I get it, Opal's eyes are nasty), but overall I liked this story. You gave up on a lot of scenery description, but it was in favour of moving the plot along. I think you can cut most of the details about visiting each household, as it felt like the real focus of everything was the Granny Smith incident. I could see the ending coming, but the nonchalant way it was done made me laugh out loud.
Overall, that's reading time well spent.
I was afraid this was going into "Weekend at Bernie's" territory ... and I was right XD
Glad that she wasn't really dead, tho. I kind of expected it, but I didn't expect it to go on as long as it did. Good stuff!
I was thinking it might go to the "Weekend at Bernie's" territory as well. Sure enough.
LOVED this line: “Sometimes when Granny Smith is taking her rest, she can get a little… still,” Applejack said. “Probably should’ve warned you. It even rattles me sometimes.”
...and the last part of the Letter to Princess cracked me up!
All in all, a great story!
nice my reaction
Dear lord, the punchline
My sides, hurts oh god
Have some things I can't give you anymore and a or two. Loved it
Oh my god, how have I not read this before? 5 stars and 2 thumbs up.
Oh wow... How have I not heard of this before? In fact, if it wasn't for the anthropology tv tropes page I would have never found it! You sir, are a master at writing Lyra! Keep it up!
>>296473296473 Is that a Ghostbusters reference I see?
I love this! I was laughing all the way through it!
I finally found this side story through TV Tropes. Whoops!
I cracked up when I read the letter at the end.
Well then... I have no idea what to say about this at all.
It's under n for necromancy Lyra. But the spell is pretty difficult to learn. Let alone in a week.
We seriously need more dark comedies around here. Romantic comedies are over-rated.
Loved it, the whole premise is absolutely hilarious, and it felt fresh. bravo sir
Started funny. Turned dark. Became "Weekend at Bernie's." Ended funny. I approve.
Nah. "Weekend at Bernie's" dragged the joke out way too long. This didn't beat the dead horse at all. (I don't apologize for the pun. It was necessary.)
I'm scared now.
What's up with this dark tag I don't even... Omg what this is terrible I ... Oh shoo its just a "Weekend at Bernie's"
Pretty amusing story. Nice to see that morbid humor is not restricted to Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy or Twilight. The letter at the end was probably the best part.
Also, you should always call a doctor before you declare somepony dead. Being buried alive would be a terrible thing.
Your faithful students,
Lyra and Bon-Bon
Love that line!