They say we all wear masks. A thousand, million different faces shown to the world, disguises, tricks, and subterfuge, to protect us from the grinding, caustic assault of the world we live in. But who is Vinyl Scratch, behind the mask? Behind the glasses? Loner? Distant? Detached? And who is Octavia? Alcoholic? Apathetic? Abrasive?
Only time will tell.
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Well, that was unexpectedly...beautiful? Poetic? Emotional? I don't know what adjective I'm looking for, but it's a good one, I'm sure.
The emotional connotation from every scene was piercing. The wonderfully-portrayed, base dance scenes, the monotony of Vinyl's social interactions, the sadness after the fire; I loved it.
The dialogue, though, was really dry and boring. Nothing was gained from any of it, despite the potential each opportunity afforded.
All in all, it was good. I'll be sure to set this to give me email updates.
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Thanks for your comment! I appreciate the feedback.
Others have commented on the dryness of the dialogue, and while it partly was chosen as a stylistic difference, I do obviously need to work on that in the next chapter.
I appreciate it.
—NCorven
Okay. It is definitely interesting, and I don't mind the dialogue:if you've read a single fic of mine, you must know that I'm a fan of simple dialogue, so I really like yours. The whole concept is pretty vague yet, but I already have my speculations. I'm faving it for future reading.
P.S. The fire bit came as a surprise, but... plot devices - where would we be without 'em?
2902353 So this version of Vinyl is Rarity's cousin?
Actually, I like the subversion of the standard Vinyl tropes. Making her a precise and meticulous pony will make this standout in the OctaScratch world. Also, I think Vinyl's dialogue was right for Vinyl, dry as it is. She would be a boring conversationalist most of the time, as she seems like the sort of person who has a hard time facing her own emotions because they're too messy. The trick is to make sure that it's only Vinyl who talks like that.
Liked and fav'ed
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Hey, thanks! I'm really glad to have feedback, especially from a distinguished fic writer such as yourself. I'm glad to hear at least someone didn't find the dialogue cumbersome, that was the main complaint. Anyway, I'm working on the Octavia chapter right now to get the ball rolling, so that'll probably be up in the coming days.
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Thank you! I'm glad to hear at least someone understands why I made Vinyl the way I made her. My headcanon is a little different from the majority of the fandom, I'm sure, and I'd toyed with the idea of bringing that out in writing. I'm just a little confused by your association of her with Rarity. Did I imply that somewhere or something, because that wasn't exactly my intention.
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Good to hear.
2923855 Just her fussy personality matches Rarity's. (I've also read a story or two that used the similar coat color to create a relationship; in order to bring the mane six and the other mane six into close contact. My own headcanon, really.)
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Ah, ok. Well, it does sort of make sense, but I most likely won't implement that. It would likely get wayyyy too complicated.
Interesting, tracking.
And put a space between paragraphs and conversation lines, this looks like a wall of text.
Hope you finish this story and don't keep in the middle like countless of others OctaScratch fics. Sorry to be harsh in this part but I am getting tired of good and unfinished fics, and OctaScratch tends to do that.
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Thanks for you comment. Regarding the spaces, yeah, thank you for pointing that out, in the original documents, they were there, but amid the shuffle through GDocs, somehow they got lost, and I didn't realize. Thanks.
I'll do my best to keep writing. Working on the Octavia chapter now.
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Thanks for your comment! I did finally get around to fixing my spacing issue, and posting the new Octavia chapter. Enjoy!
Nice chapter.
Still good.
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Glad to hear it.
And so it begins.
I'm glad you've updated. You're getting better with each chapter.
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Thank you! I'll try to keep them coming.
—NCorven
Yay it's back!
Great chapter, and don't worry about the wait - real life catches up to everyone occaisonally.
Nice! I love it so far. Keep up the great work.
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Awesome! Thanks for your support! I'll try to have another chapter out sometime in the coming weeks.
—NCorven
This is getting very interesting indeed.
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You have very cryptic comments XD
—NCorven
3236828 I try.
Update YAY
Nice chapter, waiting for the next.
I like how Vinyl doesn't even know 'Tavi in this fic. It seems Vinyl's an asocial pony that does her work and doesn't talk to a soul, i feel that will change soon, but I read on...
5 / 5 stars..
Y'know, I usually click away when a story about Vinyl Scratch begins with a rave, but this was done really well. I'll definitely check this out again once its complete.
Hmm, this story is different from what I'm use to..
I like it.
It's unique and entertaining! 
I hope for an update