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Dayyum gurl. How do you think of this? Brilliant! That's what it is!
You make me ashamed of myself for enjoying this so much.
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You are awesome, that's all there is to it.
It's a solid premise, but this story went buy a little too quickly for my tastes.
I think a new, more methodical chapter is in order.
Maybe Cheerilee could bring her 'toy' to work and play with it without her students knowing.
Well, it was rather good for a one-shot.
But seriously, I think you mispelled Cheerilee's name in every possible way to do so.
2902504 Hehe. Whoops? I'll fix them! Thanks for telling me. Even my friends didn't even notice. Lol! Thank you!
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No problem. Keep up the good stuff, I'm going to track your works. ( just a little encouragement
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You should try to find an editor.
Definitely a good story, but I would suggest looking into getting a good proofreader. Some of the sentences didn't flow right
Like here, it should be stuck.
Scraped*
If you're describing a situation, you don't want to suddenly change to numbers. The only time this really works in a fiction is if your character is reading off a list of things, like 1/2 cup of oil in a cupcake recipe.
What's wrong here doesn't need stated
Her*
And a writing tip I learned in my English 101 is that you don't want to start every sentence with the same word. Change it up so that you don't start every sentence in a paragraph using she.
But keep up the work, this was definitely interesting.
EDIT: If you need to find one, you can always take a look at proofiction.net. Pretty much everyone on the site is a proofer.
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I love your user-picture thing.
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A teasing Cloudchaser.
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I've recently become quite the fan of Flitter and Cloudchaser. Hence, I love the picture. 'Tis hot!
There's got to be more to the dildo...... hmmmmm
Short and Sweet.
This is the first clip fic I've ever read.
Now I need to go and wash my hands... in ph1 hydrochloric acid
Whale Den
. Is it bad if I like this? I feel as if I should feel bad about liking this, but I don't...Oh well, it's already been established that I'm crazy 
Oh, by the way, I think it's kind of short, but meh
Could have used more build-up and more detail, but still entertaining.
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Oh, fine, have a like anyway.
Damn what a mess to clean up in the morning lol