Four peculiar ponies, each a student of Discord, break the rules and travel back in time to meet their idols: the Elements of Harmony. Unfortunately, not all time travel is that simple.
Surprises lurk in the shadows of Equestria, and mystery surrounds these lost ponies as they remain locked in time. Twilight and Zeno must solve the time paradox holding them hostage, or watch the universe collapse upon itself. Given the chance of a lifetime, will Zeno risk everything for all he holds dear or settle for mediocrity?
This guy helped design the main characters.
This is just an old story that I keep up to show how, well, unskilled I used to be.
Chapters (7)
AAAAAHHHHHH WHY SO MANY DELETES?!
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Secret editor conversation. It's deleted so you readers don't have to muck through all the editing notes
2911813 I recommend gdocs or PMs, in that case.
You're lucky there were explosions. Good chapter... though that bit with Lyra and Bon Bon (The closing part of that) was not needed in the slightest.
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I tried PM's, but he preferred that method, I suppose. Better organization? Whatever the reason, he was a great help. Definitely gdocs next time.
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but it's foreshadowing
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Too confusing, for the most part. I mean, the last 3 chapters they acted like they didn't know they were in the past.
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time passed. *shrug.* Any suggestions? I thought one of them recognizing their mom was good enough, but if not...
This story seems good, but I am confused and lost in 5 different dimensions about what is happening. Lets see how this goes....
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so are the characters. *ba dum dum tiss*
Because of the plans I have, I can't change some of what I've already written, but I'm working on it making more sense. However, the other shoe is about to drop and the plot will really begin, and it'll be easier to follow.
However, thanks for giving this a read. I really appreciate it!
3061788 Shoe...? Ponies have shoes now?? (... I'm so sorry)
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... you've got me there.
When the other horseshoe drops
3062104 No Sergio. The joke has gone too far. Don't. Calm down. Calm down. This joke is too long now. Caaaalm doo... Which one of the other 3?
Damn it.
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Probably the front right one, especially if punches get thrown
or the back left, if Applejack hits first
3062149 *sigh* This implies SOOOO many things that will rip apart time-space... But I'll let it pass... Just this one...
Also, I've always wondered what happens if I do this
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Edit: Sorry, ponylovingdragon, I didn't mean it D:
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you have nooooooooo idea
I'd recommend a movie, but that would give away the
Ermmm... Uhmmmm... I am lost. Again. At the same time. Lostception. I hope you are aiming at making us feel lost, cause this is veeeeeeeeery weird
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some if it is, I suppose. Please just tell me what
I'm about to tear my hair out and just go back to writing one-shots if I'm going to keep sucking at this
I like this so far, but some questions are raised now.
1. I could've sworn Zee was a girl.
2. Why did the Mane 6 try to use the Orbital Friendship Beam on them if they were the ones tied up by Skates?
3. Zee recognizes Twilight as "without the wings", so does he/she exist at the time of Twilight's coronation?
This is going in my faves and Read Later.
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1. Kind of the point. Androgynous means a combination of masculine/feminine traits. In other words, Zeno is a stallion that looks like a mare.
2. The foursome made a mess of things, so they just assumed. I suppose I could make that more clear...
3. Yes. Twilicorn exists. However so far it's implied that Celestia stepped down.
Saw this on "Pulling the Plug?". Have a lot of stories on my plate right now. But when my list gets shorter I'll be giving this a go. It looks like it'll be good.
3075720 Excellent, excellent. I look forward to reading more, friend.
You know I wanna read this to see how it turned out after we first talked about it that and I'd love to see some of lovely created OC's interact with the world.