Socialite

This story is a sequel to Masks

With the failure and disbandment of the Carnival, Overseer #17092 is promoted to Socialite and tasked with quelling rumors of resistance in the frontier villages of Equestria. He finds himself in the remote mining village of Hallow Shades, with an adventure ahead of him.
Book 2 of Masks.

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JustAnotherTimeLord

JustAnotherTimeLord #1 · Apr 18th, 2014 · · ·

You have received a free review. Head on over here to take a look at it.

TwizzleDragon

TwizzleDragon #2 · Apr 18th, 2014 · · ·

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I would like to apologize if this is reply ends up offending you.
Please, refrain from reviewing me without asking in the future. I understand my grammar needs work, and the vocabulary isn't supposed to represent me, it represents my character. I meant this story to be for teens, so I'm sorry if I'm not using a large vocabulary for college students to appreciate my work.
I'm also a little mad about that part where you said that this story is basically another chapter to the prequel, it is not. This story has a different main character, setting, and plot.
If its not too much to ask, could you tone down how you say things? I received a vibe of arrogance and narcissism when I read the words "free review," as if you were gracing myself with a present. And anyways, who charges for reviews on this site?

JustAnotherTimeLord

JustAnotherTimeLord #3 · Apr 18th, 2014 · 1 · ·

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I apologize, as that wasn't my intention to be arrogant. I was simply stating that it is technically a free review because you never approached me, and I had the intention of surprising you with a thorough review that I hoped might help you. I am not, as I said, trying to be arrogant. I'm not an arrogant person.

And also, some people DO charge for reviews on this site. The majority take being approached to receive one, as I said with WRITE.

And I suppose that if it is entirely a different story, then my bad. I really took a risk even trying to review a sequel story, and I now kind of regret even doing it because I can easily get the wrong idea from everything. Though, if everything else is different from the original story, I wonder how this is a sequel. I suppose you have plans for that?

Anyway, sorry for any confusion and possible anger? Not sure. It just kinds of sucks now because I spent quite a while on that review to try and help you. But it should be known that if you recognize your errors, then you would be best helped if you go and try to get help. You have potential as a writer, but you can only get there with some help.

Chaos Eclipsed

Chaos Eclipsed #4 · Apr 24th, 2014 · · ·

He had been defeated, not by any means of becoming a martyr, but by a child, and her dream.

Good work #20443. Good work, indeed.

Anyway, after Masks, it'll be nice to see some of the rest of this world and how it operates. Can't wait to see how 'Socialite' acts and reacts with the setting. Onwards and upwards!

Dragonborne Fox