Blood Moon, a captain in an elite group of royal soldiers is tasked with meeting and protecting Princess Twilight Sparkle. However, due to the instability of the rogue factions in Equestria he does not fully realize how much danger that entails.
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i said this before but, when you switch speaker's start a new paragraph and line to separate the speakers from one another. it helps the story flow better.
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Hmm, After doing some more research I will attempt to do this. It is just going to require a bit of editing I believe. As always I am still trying to get used to writing. Thank you for the suggestions.
2983728 NP it is a very common mistake and you are not the worst offender i have seen entire stories that are just a wall of text no spaces at all.
In reference to the suggestion made by plp855, I am going through my story and editing it to make it easier on the eyes. I have to admit, using his suggested format does make it better to look at. It also has the added bonus of making my search for grammar mistakes more manageable.
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Finally, I had just finished formatting the text from the chapters. I hope that it makes it easier for people to read.
After long consideration while I have been editing this story and in the spirit of proper tagging, I decided to pull the "Tragedy" tag. While the story does indeed include tragic events, it is not a main theme. True tragedies almost always end up with some horrible end for the hero(e.g. Shakespeare's Hamlet). It also restricted me too much in that most positive outcomes would rarely happen due to the tragic nature. While Blood Moon is often reckless, he does not always fail in what he is trying to do. So in turn I removed it on the same grounds of why I did not include the "Romance" tag, it was a secondary theme, not a main one. The two main themes of the story are just "Adventure" and it being "Dark". So those two are the only ones to remain.
P.S. Do not worry, the gore, sex and mature are also to remain as they are.
So, why did they attack the family?
To add un-needed drama?
Grim-derp?