ok editing for this chapter is not an unusual mistake but when you switch speaker's start a new paragraph and line to separate the speakers from one another. also when thinking in their head try using different notation like '...' or "..." to annotate that it is not spoken aloud at the beginning of the thought instead of at the end.

I like it... If the other chapters can hold the hyper of the first this is going to be a really, good story...

Issac Clarke would like his armor back.