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I was not expecting to like this, as it centers around my least favorite characters. What a pleasant surprise!
Really enjoyed Snips and Snails' chemistry. You not only made me like those two, but Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon, as well. And most amazingly, you've sold me on the ship. I'm still cross-eyed over the fact.
I'm not certain as to what sort of dark art you had to call upon to make these things possible.
A few typos here and there. "Snips knew his cheeks were burn", a few missing punctuations, etcetera, but nothing too detracting.
Watching.
"You have charm?" <- Easily the best line in this fic 
This was new, I'll give you that! Heck, I don't like Diamond, but there was something about this that really appealed to me 
God I love Snips and Snails friendship! 
Those guys are funny as hell!
Great story! Here take my sta... thumbs up... that just doesn't sound very exciting 
-Glassed
Despite how much I detest Snips, this was cute. 
I do like it when people give tough characters a second chance, and I'm really a push over for Gilda and Trixie and the like...
WHY ARE YOU GUYS SO EASY TO FEEL SORRY FOR? And now for Rarity being confused.
- Gilda...Trixie...Diamond Tiara... WHY.... I know, right? - 
Well, this was unexpected. I'm glad you all like this fic. I felt like shipping two of the most under-appreciated characters in the show and the results speak for themselves. This fic has been sitting around in my computer since November and I decided to finish it for valentine's not-day.
It's a novel ship.
Giving Diamond Tiara some depth would not be a bad thing.
However, I have some problems. Please let me give you some concrete examples and some constructive suggestions how to fix them:
"Really, well I await the train of gaggling doofusses you show up with." Diamond Tiara turned away. "And boys, comics don't counts," she added before walking off with her nose in the air, Silver Spoon following right after in a similar pose.
Do you mean giggling doofusses and comics don't count? I suppose I should cut you some slack; this is dialogue, and the malapropisms and grammatical irregularities may be deliberate.
Another one:
"No," Snips sighed, sitting himself down at a patch of grass parallel to her. “You’re stuck with me.” His voice made it obvious he didn’t like being there and more than she did. He wanted to leave, but he didn’t.
There is a typo here that makes the sentence unintelligible. Please try ...like being there any more than she did.
Another one:
“You’re welcome, Diamond Tiara.” He looked up into her beautiful eyes, and felt his world melting away slowly. “And thank you for making this the best night ever.” She stayed silent, but he could see the brilliantness of her feelings shining through to him. “So, wanna dance?”
To my surprise, brilliantness actually is an English word. However, the synonym brilliance is older, more commonly used, easier to type, and less painful to read.
I will be honest -- I didn't read the whole thing. I looked at it, saw things like the three examples above when superficially scanning the text, and just walked away. Sorry.
My good sir, you deserve an internet for this fanfic. You really do. I wasn't exactly sure how it would turn out, but I really like the way it ended up going. I was a tiny bit confused by the flashing back and forth, initially, but it worked in the end. All the characters, even Diamond Tiara, are in character. Her "spoiled brat" personality we see in the show does seem like something that could indeed be a mask to hide her real self. I wasn't all that surprised in regards to Sweetie Belle. She does seem a bit oblivious.
Anywho, I think this needs to be expanded upon. If nothing else, this needs an epilogue!!
We demands moar of teh magiks!! 
Well I feel downright guilty about replacing this in the featured bar (I'm the author of Devotion if you're wondering) It really was well done. It was great showing of Snips having a great internal conflict. Tiara was a very well balanced character abd that was great. I enjoyed your Rarity and Sweetie Belle.
Now for the bad
As has already been pointed out there were a few typos. My other complaint was about Snails. He was a little too perfect. He seemed a bit to flawless. I guess it was to give Snips a sort of shing standard to look at.
If you would like I could review this on my youtube webcast (only 40 subscribers but still).
Well done! I don't enjoy characters having vulgar and ponified swearing, but it worked well for the story. I also think Snips should have been a bit dim and Snails a bit absent minded. I just like having character personalities as close to the show as possible. 
This was great i really liked how you made made us feel sympathy for Diamond Tiara and that she acts so tsundere because she's alone. Snips was awesome and I thought it was great that even though he's a slightly short and chubby nerd he still has more friends than Diamond and doesn't take shit from anyone. Kudos for making Snails the voice of reason. I now accept this shipping as canon. I mean wow Snips and Snails are heroes amongst geeks.
As I was reading this i kept hearing the song Rich Girl by Hall and Oats.
You're a rich girl, and you've gone too far
Cause you know it don't matter anyway
You can rely on the old man's money
You can rely on the old man's money
It's a bitch girl, but it's gone too far
Cause you know it don't matter anyway
Say money, money won't get you too far, get you too far
And don't you know, don't you know
That it's wrong to take what he's giving you
So far gone on your own
But you can get along if you try to be strong
But you'll never be strong cause
You're a rich girl (rich girl), and you've gone too far
Cause you know it don't matter anyway (rich girl)
You can rely on the old man's money
You can rely on the old man's money
It's a bitch girl (rich girl) and it's gone too far
Cause you know it don't matter anyway (rich girl)
Say money, money won't get you too far, get you too far
High and dry, out of the rain
It's so easy to hurt others when you can't feel pain
And don't you know that a love can't grow
Cause there's too much to give
Cause you'd rather live for the thrill of it all, oh
You're a rich girl (rich girl), and you've gone too far
Cause you know it don't matter anyway (rich girl)
You can rely on the old man's money
You can rely on the old man's money
It's a bitch girl (rich girl), and it's gone too far
Cause you know it don't matter anyway (rich girl)
Say money, but it won't get you too far
Say money, but it won't get you too far
Say money, but it won't get you too far, get you too far
And you say you can rely on the old man's money
You can rely on the old man's money
You're a rich girl (rich girl), a rich girl
Oh, you're a rich, bitch girl (rich girl) yeah
Say money, but it won't get you too far
I found lyrics almost appropriate for the fic.
Peace out.
Image: http://28.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_lyqfqkSWX91r4etiro1_400.gifI really enjoyed this and feel free to take away some of the man cards i have left, but this was so fucking cute and adorable. This is now the new default shipping for Diamond Tiara and Snips. I never left a fic with a better feeling of complete innocence and d'awww. Kudos sir you win the internet.
Here's a present it's not much it's only a gif:
Image: http://chzheroes.files.wordpress.com/2012/02/superheroes-batman-superman-no-bunnies-allowed.gifPeace Out.
Holy crap, there's more! Woo!
I loved this. Even if I didn't love the Pulp Fiction out-of-order thing. I want to hug everyone. Except Shady. I'll help him pick up his teeth instead.
A couple typos. Instances of "Apologies" where instead it should be "Apologize", and "Cross" in place of "Crossed". You ended a few sentences with an "at", too.
This IS a one-shot, but with how much people liked it I decided to do a follow-up to give the story more conclusion. This story itself is done, and if I do decide to do a follow-up story it won't be for a LONG time since I have too much on my plate as is. Glad you all liked it though.
OH god I love this SO MUCH. This is the first time a fic that wasn't intended to be sad still brought some moisture to these eyes.
Not from sadness.. but.. from just... pure... adorable, d'awwww inducing, heartwarming beauty. I love this pairing and how you write it. I love it to death!
Should you ever decide to return to this for a follow up, I will be eagerly ready for it.
thought it was sniping a diamond...then read the fic and reread the title
I have very little experience with the stories of the sea, but let me give it my best attempt.
I feel that this story delivered exactly what it promised. Diamond and Snips were to be paired, and they were. I believe the vivid descriptions did their job, and I can always appreciate that provided they're not too long-winded. These weren't, though. As I understand it, descriptions are what make romance stories work, like sprinkles on a dessert. I saw this story was a mixture of two different flavors of pudding, and neither of them were tapioca. One flavor tasted sweet while the other one was surprisingly cold. They blended together for an interesting taste. Unfortunately, my teeth are a bit sensitive to cold food.
Correct me if I'm wrong, but it's my understanding that this story takes place a few years in the future. Snips has a more developed sense of magic than the show would suggest, there seemed to be a general feel of maturity in the dialogue and mannerisms of most of the students, and feelings of infatuation tend to come about at an older age.
I watched the anime "My Sister Can't Be This Cute", so I can say quite a bit about the phantom known as tsundere. I'm not against it. I'm not really for it. I just try to enjoy it when I see it. It can be interesting on occasion, like in this story, for instance. It makes the relationship require more effort, but I might argue that the facade was dropped a bit too suddenly. There was definitely enough time spent before the transition, but I just felt it odd that Diamond went from starting to turn to immediately thanking, complimenting, and apologizing as if a few more hours suddenly jumped by. <- Opinion
I suppose that's about it; although, we never did find out what Sunny Day did at the dance. Perhaps it shall forever remain a mystery.
When I was working out the details of the story originally, it started out as if they were in a high-schoolish setting. I wanted to ditch that though, but yes, you can say it takes place further into the future than the show takes place. As for the tsundere thing itself, I honestly was not thinking of it when writing Diamond Tiara. Everyone else kinda said tsundere and I looked back and thought, "yeah, I guess she kinda is in this." Since the story was a one-shot, yeah, it's kind of abrupt. I just wanted to try writing this premise. Based on the feedback I got, it was more or less a success.
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