I'm just a fun-loving person who loves My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic.
After the death of her parents, Pinkamena wanders about, a hole in her heart and a heavy burden on her shoulders. When things are at their worst, an unexpected light shines through in the form of a light-hearted apple farmer with a past of her own.
Warning: alternate universe in which Pinkie Pie's parents are dead.
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Rather nice, could have even more potential if you were to wish for it to.
"No stallion for any considerable period can wear one face to himself and another to the multitude, without finally getting bewildered as to which may be the true."
- Nathaniel Hawthorne, or Mark Twain.
Yeah, I know it could definitely go other places. For example, I had Applejack explaining (in more depth) what happened to her parents. I also was going to make the tree they were sitting under Bloomberg. However, those sections just didn't fit into the story as I had it at the finishing point.
But, I still hope you enjoyed it. 
I cried..
2768382 Aw, I'm sorry!
But I hope it was the good sort of cry...if there is one... 
"The mental image of her mother smiling down at her, alongside her father with that approving frown of his, was almost too much…"
Approving frown I really like that statement a good fan fiction nice work
How can you write something as good as this when you're half asleep?
I can do that, but it's really hard and I can't write nearly as good as this... AT ALL. 
Really nice story, flowed really smoothly, maybe ellaborate on aj's own circumstances a bit more (big mac and granny smith particularly), other than that it was great :D not bad for a sleep deprived mind!
2796314 Thank you so much for the compliment. Yeah, I was going to add more about her circumstances, but then it felt like Applejack was going on for two pages about her own troubles when the character seems more likely to pay more attention to the filly in need. But yeah, I wish I could have added more...
2779832 For some reason, I normally write my best at eleven o'clock at night to midnight...don't ask me why.
But thank you so much for commenting and complimenting!
2777365 Thank you very much. It took a bit of finagling with my brain to come up with that one, but I'm glad someone appreciated it.
New chapter?
This was really good! I enjoyed it and did feel the sadness intended. The only thing I could possibly think of that could've been better is if her parent's death had been immediately before this like I thought it had when I started reading it; her immediate pain would make more sense if she hadn't been wandering around trying to keep things going for awhile.
Great sstory! ^_^
5679475 I understand where you're coming from; it would have been fresh in her memory, making the pain that much more acute. I was trying to portray how crushed she was feeling under the weight of trying to support her sisters from afar, feeling that she didn't have any time to properly mourn. Yeah...I'm kinda twisted that way.
3710375 I'm sorry, but not only do I not have any idea what the next chapter would entail, but the creativity bug has not bitten me in quite a while for this fandom... Sorry...
This was simply a sad and beautiful little story that was written well. I thought that you did a good job overall in the plot and in the characterisations of young AJ and Pinkie. Simply well done my friend!
-frost
5818680 Thank you very much for your kind words. They mean a lot.
Very well done
!!! Cried with all of my heart
