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Applejack and Rainbow Dash are awaiting Braeburn's arrival from Appleloosa. He's visiting for a few days, and he's bringing his mysterious marefriend with him. AJ's set up a double-date to welcome them to town, but It turns out that Brae's marefriend is a familiar face.
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I'm assuming there's not going to be a sequel? Not like I'd consider reading it if there was one though, I totally don't want to read a comedy about the events that occur afterwards and how both Rainbow and Lightening completely fail and probably end up breaking some things and sleeping on the couch. Nope.
Pfft. Those last lines.
This was very enjoyable. I'd like to believe that Lightning Dust isn't a complete douchewaffle, and let's be serious, her and Dash would make great friends (the town they host their competitions in may believe otherwise, though, depending on how much minor havoc they wreak). Thanks for a fun read.
Well I think this story was definitely focused on Rainbow Dash and Lightning Dust more than Braeburn, who probably could have been just about anyone related to Applejack without changing the story much, but it was still pretty entertaining!
When Dashie said bet I could make her scream louder I couldn't stop laughing.
I would say that this story is decent. It doesn't break the mold in any fantastic way, but there are some moments I particularly enjoyed; the competitive wing hug. and the competitive nature of Dash and AJ's relationship. Dash's overly competitive nature is highlighted at the begginning of the story with the race between her and AJ (that whole dynamic was pretty adoracute, and feels natural), and it comes back to serve as the main conflict (Dash's and Lightning Dust's mutual need for competition), but also comes around as the resolution when it becomes a point of bonding for the two. That was pretty cool.
I didn't care for some of the comedic elements. They weren't bad, but nothing stuck me as particularly funny.
I wish more attention was devoted to exploring why Lightning Dust and Braeburn came to be a couple,and their relationship dynamics, and what not. I guess what I wanted out of the story is a bit more characterization for LD.
It's an interesting twist on the prompt to have the focus of the story be more on the friendship of two couples.
That. Was. AWESOME!!!!! And when Rainbow said, 'I bet I can make her scream louder'
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I like this ending better.
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That.. Is the ending.
*Grins* Very nicely done, It was cute and very well characterized.
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It was three AM, don't judge me.
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That was hilarious , well done my friend. From the hugging contest to the ending it had me laughing out loud.
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Poor AJ and Brea lol
Loved it, but seriously, we need more Braeburn and Lightning Dust. I want to know how they got together. (Besides, this couple is so cute. I just might start shipping it myself....Nah, I'm going to to do it now.
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...this needs a sequel. Pronto
I know this is late, but I was going to write the exact thing as this. Not exactly but Lightning Dust X Braeburn fic. Found the pair funny. I liked this fic.
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XD! That ending...
Lovely stuff, Twinkletail. Though the couple was fine for a crack pairing, I thought the actual shipping here could have been between three couples, instead of two
LD's competitive nature hasn't changed, but I liked the way she was portrayed. Good job she's only visiting tho'; if Ponyville just about holds together when AJ and Dash get competitive, it will not fare any better if Dust's added in there...
Also, the ending. As has been said in previous comments, Futurama has the right idea
"The train!!!"
THAT ENDING!!
...that's it? No clop?
Bleeeeeeeeeeh.
That is freaking awesome!
The salty spitoon?
Isnt that the place in spongebob?
Prepare yourselves mares and stallions!
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grabs camera this is going on the pony hub ASAP