Ever since her loss in single combat to Queen Chrysalis, Princess Celestia has been unable to get so much as one good night's sleep. Her dreams are plagued by nightmares, and the lack of sleep is beginning to interfere with her royal duties.
Perhaps all the Princess needs is a good night's rest... Unless there's something more to these dreams than she is willing to suspect.
Story rated teen just in case due to dark themes. Nothing sexual or gory though.
Cover art provided once again by the super awesome-white tigress-12158: link
Chapters (9)
Poodles indeed...
But we trust you. We're off to a good start, anyway!
> Princess Celestia, goddess of the sun...
> “I may be a princess, but I am no more or less a pony than anypony else.”
Hmm, I sense a contradiction here. Is she a goddess, or is she a pony? (I personally am very biased against the goddess interpretation, by the way.)
2752961 Whoops! Sorry, I must have let that one slip by.
Thanks for pointing that out for me. I've since changed that instance of the word 'goddess.' I think of princess Celestia as a powerful immortal pony, but certainly not a goddess. She is immortal, but not infallible.
At least not in this story anyways.
UGhhh you don't have to unpublish then republish in order to edit the chapters. all you have to do is edit them. simple as that.
this is probably why I have to drop story's when there chapters send me an alert even after I've seen them.
I like the way you explained Luna noy just going into Celestia's dream and fixing everything. Fave'd, I eagerly await the next chapter.
Was good. Mostly waiting to see what the evil plan is, though.
Very interesting.
Like where this is going. Kind of silly that the princess of the night isn't immune to sleep manipulation, though.
2915131 Just because Luna can enter the dream realm doesn't necessarily mean she is immune to what may happen there. Just like her sister she is very powerful, but she is still a pony just like anypony else. In circumstances like now when she has been overpowered, she would be just as vulnerable as anypony else.
This story is fantastic! I'd love to see more! You deserve more likes and favorites. I can only give you one of each!
3053080 Thank you very much for the kind words! I was worried that this story wasn't getting much of a response because of the lack of comments. But now that I got yours...
I kind of went crazy and pounded out the new chapter WAY sooner than expected. I'll be putting it up momentarily.
I defonately want to see more but only if Chrysalis can actually WIN
This is gonna suck.... I hope Tia can somehow fight out of it...
Hm... interesting start. I must say. but my interactive rainbow dash says "she would rather read Daring Doo" but I think I'll stick with this.
Next chapter!
* is holding more bricks tossing it up and catching it* That will teach you to double post.
Anywho decent chapter really shows a conflict building between the two sisters allowing for the pride of Celestia, being a princess and all, allowing her to try and hold a high level independence . feeling that others depend on her and she cannot depend on others.
*ahem* first
Well Celestia's inner Gollum got her to pull a complete 180 impressive but does this not render the last chapter pointless?
I'm Just Saiyan
Everypony who gets it =
What a dork.
it's "saying" what are you stupid?
Everypony else =
This chapter was... Interesting. I can't tell if the changeling is messing with Luna or Celestia or both at this point. or if Celestia is now willing to help do to the last chapter. This is kinda confusing.
but on the other hand I look forward to see how this plays out.
Heart Murmur? Heart Murmur? Even though it's a changeling they probably replaced the actual doctor with that name. Just wow.
Thats like trusting a doctor named heart attack or Cancer. You are aware that a Heart Murmur is a bad think when the heart sends blood back the wrong way in the blood flow. what a horrible name for a medical person.
Weird name aside... very interesting how your kinda isolating Celestia putting the one person she would turn to into a coma. Divide and conquer and all that. But why has it taken a over a week for Celestia to be manipulated and Luna one night? When she is at her most powerful? And for that matter why not just put Celestia into a coma then replace her all of her subjects love her feed on that for the rest of existence?
Just a thought.
So again they get Luna in a coma and process her that way. and have decided to only go after Celestia when she sleeps? I suppose there would be this whole phycological barrier solidifying Chrysalis' control if Celestia went to her.
But I must admit I'm a worried about Luna are the sisters gonna have to duke it out? and what did it mean by a new body? I'm confused will she turn into Nightmare Moon for the changelings? or be turned into a changeling? but this makes me wonder if Chrysalis is the only queen ever seen and Luna and Celestia are princesses does that mean that Chrysalis is their...
Mother? is that what your getting at?
EVERYTHING IS JUST INSANE!
Well I just have one question. Luna said that she was the only one who could dream walk then why is the queen there?
I know they can screw with pony minds put not on a level like this. can i guess that this is the second to last chapter can't wait to see how this ends. and if the good guys win you better have one hell of a good reason why and not pull out the cheep answer.
I think you should try something related to
This
I see great potential in this story and it's ideas, I was wondering if I could use some of the parts in a potential story I was going to make. It's... going to be a clop, I hope you don't mind.
3211481 Actually, I'd be honored if you were to do that. Clop or otherwise. As long as it isn't futa or some such weirdness I'd probably like to read it myself.
Thanks for the video too. It's awesome!
3211844 no problem hopefully the vid inspires you to write a fluffy fic involving Fluttershy.
Until I write it, I'll keep this story in Queu.
With an ending like that, it might have been better off just being declared cancelled instead of complete
But I understand, the creativity well dries up, and you gotta move on to fresher territory.
well, as disappointed i am in this ending, i can understand why you couldn't continue and i much prefer something like this rather than having the story just stopping.
You might hate me for this, but what ruined the story the most, in my mind, was the fact that you finished it.
Allow me to explain. To me, the best kind of Dark story is not your typical "scare them witless, the thing under the bed" story. Nor is it the "so-gory-that-you-vomit-every-time-you-think-about-it-Cupcakes-blood-gore-intestines" Dark story. No, the best kind of Dark story is the one that is never actually resolved. For most writers (including myself), this is very hard if not impossible to pull off, due to our desire to bring the story to a point of closure. However, as far as Dark stories go, closure can be a bad thing. The most effective Dark stories are the ones that leave you with more questions than answers. They keep you up all night, not because you're scared, but because you just can't stop thinking about the questions. It ends up forcing each reader to, essentially, create their own ending; one far worse than any author could hope to produce, since it will be entirely different and completely personal to each individual reader. Saying what happened and the end result takes away this sense of mystery that is the heart of the Dark genre.
To bring it down to this story in particular, I feel that this could have been far more effective as a Dark story if it had ended much sooner. For instance, Chapter Five or Six, when the reader realizes that the Changelings are going to brainwash/have brainwashed Princess Luna into serving Chrysalis. At this point, the reader has just enough information to have a general idea of what would likely happen next, but the ending is still up in the air. It's the same reason that many authors end chapters on cliffhangers. It's not just for trolling readers, I assure you.
Anyway, there's my huge shpeal on Dark stories. Don't get me wrong; while the ending left much to be desired, the story itself was still good. Unfortunately, however, you made the mistake of taking it too far. It was great, up until the point where there was no mystery. Again, this only applies to true Dark stories, and you're sure to make some people upset when the story is not resolved, but there will be more disappointment if the story were resolved, since it's guaranteed to not live up to-[/rant]
I'm repeating myself, aren't I?
Anyway, there you have it, and holy crap did I really just write all of that?
Write on,
Legion
I'm confused. Considering that this story has an epilogue, shouldn't it be marked as “completed” and not “cancelled”?