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This is the story of Fluttershy based on the picture of this story. Rarity arrives at Fluttershy's house for their weekly spa appointment when she finds a letter on Fluttershy's kitchen table.
This story takes place before the royal wedding.
Requested by Cosmic_Guardian
This is a one-shot.
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Everyone loves you Fluttershy! You don't have to do this!
FLUTTERSHY NOOOOOOOOOOOOO
But seriously, good story. A few punctuation errors here and there, but nothing too big. Well done. Liked and favorited.
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Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
And yeah, I need to go through a fifth time and go through the punctuation.
This fic makes me listen to Cemetery Drive by My Chemical Romance. Do the same!
reminds me of the bad ending to the silent ponyville 2...slightly different reason for drowning herself but almost the same.
3063343
So good or bad?
And I haven't read that story yet. Not usually a fan of crossovers.
3063397it's not really a crossover like say the fallout thing.it just takes elements from the game. it's not a bad story and it's nowhere near as long as the fallout thing.
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What about this story?
Good or bad?
3063460 it was good
poor fluttershy
Take this and leave me to sit in a corner for awhile :
I won't cry.... I wont cry....dammit yep there I go......Darn you feelzz!
My tear ducts are being overloaded with spammed tears. Fluttershy deserves so much better than that.
Bravo on making the very emotional build-up from happy to sheer sadness and depression that befits the horrible actions that Butterscotch did against her.
That being said,
I can say that this story has an amazing appeal that could further more interesting story ideas. One-shot = Wonderful 9-10 
even with Fluttershy's mental state as it was at the end.
"No Fluttershy! Don't jump of the bridge please!!" I say.
She jumps.
I died.
YEA DATS RIGHT IMMA GHOST OF TYPING
god damn it why did i have to read this f*ck man this was sad really sad bit of a dark ending its like you wanted it to screw the reader over in tears... nice work although i am not crying -brings questions to my mind as to why like the boy in the stripped pijamas i didnt feel a thing for some reason- i feel sad for fluttershy because i remember a timme when i was feeling depressed and my so called "friends" were being assholes but anyways good story make another and i will read that one too maybe dealing with the death of fluttershy maybe they lose the elemants of harmony her being an elemant bearer and all. either way good story dark ending pissed aot off and made alot cry but in the end it was a nice sad story.
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f*ck butterscotch hes a dick
Now I'm very sad... good story through.
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What can I say...in fact I can't say anything because I'm to distraught right now
. A very interesting story though to be honest I'm was 99% sure Fluttershy was going to commit suicide. Feel free to put this ribbon in the long description of the fic.
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Good job, my friend. Very good job. I honestly didn't expect you to do this. You really didn't have to either. But, again, thank you. I'm putting this in a special place on my page.
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Thanks I'm glad you enjoy it.
I know what you mean, I can read a really sad, depressing, dark story, and feel "nothing". I'll love the story, I can feel what the character is going through, but I won't feel anything. So I know where you're coming from.
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Thanks, I'm glad Twilight approves!
I shall put that banner with pride!
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No problem, and thanks for putting it in a special place!
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I love SpongeBob!
3067892 thank u finally someone who gets me when I just walk out of sad movies and I am just normal people mainly my friends look at me like I'm some kind of monster ps are u gonna make a sequel like the consequences maybe if u need help them remember I'm here for ya
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A lot of people do, I made that for this story but I use it on others if its sad.
Good job on the story dude! It was a tiny bit rushed but that didn't take anything that ai like about it away. Keep it up!
3068135
I have considered it. I'm planning on writing a story for each mane six character. They'll all be different, not all dark, depressing, etc.
As for a sequel, yeah, I'd consider it. As long as I can get enough thoughts to make it worth while.
Also, I'll keep that in mind.
3068172 ok cool I'm here if u need me bro and u r a bastard u know I will read those why but whatever can't wait to read more
3067907 No problem. It deserved it. You worked very hard, so I had to give it to you.
Only one thing: Butterscotch? Really? Butterscotch? Not mad, just, really?
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Here's the story. I was writing and talking to a friend on Skype. I couldn't think of a name for the guy, so I asked him for a name. He said Butterscotch, so I went with it.
3072500 Butterscotch is the male Fluttershy. You now that right?
Also, I have another favor to ask of you...
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Actually I didn't know that, and whats up?
Well... this story made me sad face. .... Damn it! I was too late! I could had saved her!
My Junior year in High School back in 2002, my drama teacher had us read monologues for our second year of Theater. One to choose from was called "You're A Good Boy Charlie Brown". Anyway, long story short, Fluttershy reminds me of Charlie Brown: Depressed character. Too bad they don't have anti-depressants in Equestria. Really, in listening to the fanbase I'm surprised Hasbro Studios haven't written her off yet. She WOULD be the first to off herself, most likely one at that.
That very dark POV out of the way... it was a very good story! We both enjoyed it. It made us think back a lot to high school when there was a lot of this stuff going on and probably still does. It's a true shame when a person feels that no one is there for them
As we exchanged in our PMs, this story really proves that there is an ugly side of reality, or just reality in itself. Now a message from the both of us: Perhaps in writing this you've saved someone from themselves. The story is quite dark and sad, and it leaves the reader wondering how Rarity, Twilight, etc. all the others feel after this point and how they will continue to feel after they've ALL had the chance to read the letter and perhaps even after they've discovered that Fluttershy has done the unthinkable and it sets in over them. As humans, it is in our nature to put ourselves first, but we're sure that if a reader put themselves in *anonymous character from the main 6 - whoops 5* they'll discover that suicide is quite a selfish thing to do and the hurt that your "friends" have placed on you is nothing compared to the hurt you've placed on them.
Good story. This is going in the faves. Keep up the great work friend!
... Now on to 'The Dragon War'
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I'm glad you enjoyed it. I was having fun writing the story in the sense that, it was something different. Most of time, when someone writes Fluttershy, they make it all happy and cute. I like to write things differently. I love to write the dark side of things, the other side of the coin. Dark, depressing, sad, tragic thrive me. The reason it's easy for me to write, is because when I was a teenager I had slight depression problems (it never went too far, I never had thoughts of suicide), so I can relate to the character and I know how to describe the feeling. As they say, "It's always easier to understand what someone is going through if you've gone through it as well.". If this story saves someone's life, than that would make me one of the happiest people on earth.
Also I put that disclaimer at the bottom because I don't want people to get the wrong message here. The message I wanted to portray is: "Suicide is never the answer, there is always someone out there that loves you, that is there for you. You just have to keep looking and eventually you'll find that person.".
I'm the type of person that listens to what others have to say. I am the type of person who listens to what people have to say, and am also the person who's shoulder you can cry on. I am always there for people. And I ask nothing in return, I just like to help people, and make them happy in life.
Wow, that was a rant and a half. Anyway, I hope you'll enjoy "The Dragon War".
I've gotta stop reading about death...
Poor Fluttershy...
WoW!
Poor Fluttershy. The one that started all of this was that no good stallion Butterscotch cheating on Fluttershy.
And the way she described how her friends left her behind for some adventures, and all that, reminds me of how they do Spike. 
Powerful, sad, and deeply raw story my friend.
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I am relieved to hear you like it.
I wasn't sure you'd be a big fan of it seeing as what happened, and the fact that it was Fluttershy... yeah...
This was an easy read. I can normally tell by the first paragraph or so if I will be able to read a story, and throughout this, it was smooth sailing. I feel that you captured Fluttershy well, which is sometimes hard to do, with sad fics, as there is always the possibility of writing OOC.
I don't have any real problem with this, and it was a good, if short, piece.
You get
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3578665
I'm glad you liked it!
This is definitely one of those stories that I did because of inspiration from the picture. Thing is tho, I put a little bit of my life experience in every single one of my stories. So my stories always give a little bit about me or what I've experienced. For example I had an easier time writing about the depression Fluttershy was going through because I've experienced it myself. I've never had thoughts of suicide, but I had some depression during my last two years of high school. Once in a while I get that depressing mood, but it's been getting a lot better over the last 7 years.
Also, I was wondering... do you like Spike stories?
I have one almost done and was wondering if you would like to read that one when the time comes?
Just let me know!
Again, I'm glad you liked it!
3580164 Nope, hate Spike stories. I mean, I write a Spike story, and I hate every minute of it.
3583066
I totally forgot you did that. Lol
I apologize, I can be stupid sometimes.
3584051
Whatever do you mean, darling? Yes. we all can be forgetful sometimes, but to call yourself stupid, that just isn't proper.
I
ed this story very much it was very sad, especially the end 
I loved this story, the only problem I have with it is Rainbow Dash. I mean, in the series you can see that she really cares about Fluttershy, you can see that Flutters knows that she does and also I just wanted to know rarity's reaction to this
3105715 i agree with you there. I just graduated high school last month on the 7th ( june 7th 2014 ) and over the course of the 2013-2014 school year this one kid I became friends with during my junior year committed suicide and I dont condone it at all. My biological father committed suicide in early 2004 and it just enrages me how some people will take their own lives just because they dont wanna deal with their problems. If any of you guys have lost anyone to suicide my heart is out to you there is nothing more precious in your lives than the people you hold close to your heart and when you one of those people takes thier own life.
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I'm sorry to hear that man, and I agree, suicide is NEVER the answer. The silver lining may be covered by dark clouds, but you just gotta do everything to find it, and never stop.
4652012 yup
Okay so I liked the letter and build up to the end... but the ending sort of fell flat (on it's face in a river,)
For all that build up the ending was a major let down. Just two short paragraphs and BAM she's dead, the end. The whole of the rest of the story was having this emotional build up only for the ending to kill the mood. Should have been longer with more emotion put into it for it to really hit home. As it is the brick wall that is the ending just sort of subtracts from the rest of the story.
Also we should have seen Rarity's reaction to the letter before shifting to Fluttershy... also the shift to Fluttershy could have been better then just *moving to Fluttershy*
I'm actually a little surprised that this got approved by Twilight's Library... no offense.
Do you think that this would make it on to Equestria Daily?