Celestia gives Twilight a ticket for an overnight cruise with her six companions.
Six ponies, three couples, one night.
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The line Fluttershy's voice was easy to hear against the humming of the boats engine and the gentle laps of the water below them. caught my attention, not sure if you were trying to get across how silent it was on the ocean, but it seemed more like it should have been Fluttershy's voice wasn't easy to hear against the humming of the boats engine and the gentle laps of the water below them. thats just my opinion though, the rest of the prologue worked well, and I'm Hopeful for the other chapters
This is an excellent concept. The execution...lacking, to put it kindly. This needed a ton of work before it was submitted.
Like the concept. Something much longer would been nice. But it gets the job it was meant to done.
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Yeah I kinda did I rush everything the night before on this, I might run through it and give it the polish it evidently needs all over, but I dunno when I'll get the motivation to do so lol
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Yo doug, I heard you like ships, so I put some ships on a ship in an ocean full of ships during a story about ships.
Awwwww
the flutterpie was the best bit
Now that was Awesome
it was short, sweet, and to the point. a great quick read, well done, brohoof to you /)
OMG I LOVE THIS SHIP
a great read, and coming from the grimdark section its a nice change of pace ... and straight to the point and for that u earn one brohoof /)
if i had any thing i would like to critize about it would be the lacking content ... even if i am late with this ... (and im not talking about clop coz i hate that) what i mean is the chapters COULD of been more detailed ... but i guess it was enough for my liking i guess :D
any other comments i would love to add is nice choice of ships used on this ship ... what made u choose Rarijack, Twidash and Flutterpie anyways?
oh yea ... and Celestia is such a troll xD
SO CUTE! >v<
Short, but adorable no less! I specially loved the Twidash one, and the epilogue.
I'm glad to see I'm not the only one that thinks that either Luna or Celestia would know about Twi and Dash's crush on each other and they would interfere just to "help to speed" their relationship lol
Ship shipping ships shipping shipping-ships
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I mean a shiping-ship ship shiping shipping-ships