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Roxas


My name is Roxas, and Princess Luna is the best pony.

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Meet Roxas, a Pegasus Pony from Ponyville. He has amnesia, and awakes one day in the Everfree Forest. He only knows his name, and he is a teen-aged pony. Completely struck in awe, he knows he must make it out of the forest to find out his past...and how he ended up with his cutie mark. After finding this all out, he needs to save his friendponies in an effort against the greatest evil in Equestria...

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 8 )

I hope you guys like this :)
:rainbowkiss:

Just read the first chapter. I like it. The concept might be a little worn out, but hey, you got me interested. I'll read the rest tomorrow. My only problem is the excessive use of BOLD. It somewhat detracts from the story, and most of the time, you won't need to bold things to highlight words. When someone reads, they're likely to highlight to words in their own mind. Also, I think you might have forgotten to end the Italics, as 80% of this fic is italicized, and somehow, the entire webpage of the first chapter is italicized. Was that intended?

Regardless, good work! Can't wait to read the rest. You have a 4.5 with me so far!

hmmm, this could be a good story tracking

Thanks guys, working on 2nd story today. Thanks for the reviews!:pinkiehappy:

Pure amazing Roxas the best character in kingdom hearts in equestria

226604 what be the second story

So... its a... kingdom hearts... Amnesia... and MLP crossover...
K, tracking. :yay:

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