It has been a few moths since Twilight Sparkle became an Alicorn, and in those months she has realized some things. Not only will she have fewer adventures with her friends, but she will also outlive them. And once their time comes, she will never see them again, for all of eternity. But no magic in all of Equestria can reverse this transformation. Casting blame on Princess Celestia, Twilight sets out on a quest to seek vengeance for this horrible curse. But Twilight knows she can not complete this alone, not without getting her friends to join her for one last adventure, even if they do not want to join her.
Chapters (3)
cant let this get 100% thumbs down
i hope this is a good story like your others
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I guess people here want stories to start off with murder, but I like to let it build up a story first. Oh well, thanks for the thumbs up, and I say phooey to people who thumbs down because it's not all blood are gore yet 
Well thanks
I perceive great things
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And I hope great things come. All part of that long plan.
Ok, just from the preview itself, I am HIGHLY interested. Not even goin into my Read Later list. I wanna read it NOW!
Ok, I do like what I see, though it does feel as if it could use some work. I get the feeling that you have not been writing very long, but this does seem to have a hell of a storyline to it.
Keep this going, I wanna see where this goes!
Upvoted. Favorited, And following!
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and don't worry I'm making one new chapter every week 
It's my 2nd story, and my 1st dark one so yeah it needs some work. But thanks for the compliments
2635182 Excellent!
I like where this is going so far
Ahh absolutely perfect just as how I envisioned! Cole Howell
HOLY ****
me likey were this is going and
YAY *parties* angel got pwned
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I was gonna use a ferret and I said, "You know, maybe I should just kill off Angel. Yeah that sounds like a good idea."
2667997 it was
Sorry I didn't upload a new chapter this weekend guys, I was going to this morning but I got caught up with playing with my friend
I promise you I'm gonna try to finish it before the next weekend, and I'll try my best to gore it up more than I had originally planned 
Nice improvement
!!! Some minor grammar errors in some places but the story is looking good. Keep going!!
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finished this one at 3 AM last night.
Yeah sorry about that, been working on it over 3 days because I keep getting side tracked and type fast on a new laptop with a small keyboard. If you see them just send me a PM so I can fix them
Love this story and chapter you're a great writer keep it up
2735756 Thanks
I'll do my best. This is my first dark story so I'll try my best 
WRITE MORE NERD
I returned from hiatus and I expect you to do the same
First a question, Twilight locks spike in a cellar after using a spell on him that would put them in a sleep did she ever plan on coming back for him? Or is this messed up version of Twilight planning to just leave him to rot?
2nd out of my personal feelings
Over becoming Immortal she massacres her friends and turns them into her puppets so she can get revenge on Celestia couldn't she just help them Reach Alicorn Hood?
And she goes on a torture Dash to death just because she was angry at her for killing her friend?
And who knows what other horrible things she'll do to her friends for her own selfish desires.
This Twilight is a monster and I hope she fails to get her revenge.
Its your story so I'm not going to bag on you for it but I'm thinking Twilight needs better reasons to go on her rampage.
Not the biggest fan of Twilight using Spike as a Ginny pig only to then lock him in the cellar with no sign of waking him up
Other then that, it seems interesting thus far.