5 years after Twilight Sparkle became a Princess of Equestria,
Rainbow Dash dreams of her induction into the Wonderbolts.
But will she ever fly among her heroes?
5 years after Twilight Sparkle became a Princess of Equestria,
Rainbow Dash dreams of her induction into the Wonderbolts.
But will she ever fly among her heroes?
Woah! Didn't see that last part coming! Great job with this chapter.
2610864 thanks!
i didn't know whether it would be a good idea, and i love spitfire as a character, but i think it is the right thing to do for this story
2610869 <- my reaction to first chapter's ending
Welp, now I have to know why this happened to Spitfire. *favorite*
2610990 thanks
hopefully next chapter'll be up tomorrow afternoon/evening (GMT)
Okay, why would Soarin go to Rainbow Dash of all ponies because Spitfire died? I assume the Bolt have a chain of command.
2611244 Well, she DID save the Wonderbolts lives and Soarin's pie once. So, they probably knew that they could depend on her for things like this.
i saw that coming. but what about the rips. attacked mayber?
Looks awesome thus far, but wouldn't get friends write to her? *cringes* I don't wanna break this story...
2611278 i couldn't have put it better myself
2611833 that's fine, any type of constructive criticism anyone wants to offer is welcome
oooooooo snap. shit just got serious
Good job with these two new chapters. I think it will be very interesting to see what happens next, now that Dashie has spoken to Spitfire's spirit or dream induced vision of her.
2615272 this shit just got real
HOH SNAP.
And I'm happy you took my advice about the letters! I would recommend now that you re-read this chapter, as I spotted several uncapitalized sentences.
2620312 thanks for that shoutout. i'm guilty of uncaptitalised letters quite often, i'm just distracted by the plot i'm writing!
This just keeps getting better and better.
2620352 thanks
Wasn't Fleetfoot stated to be the Fastest Wonderbolt?
2620956 did i say that, or was it the one episode when fleetfoot won the derby? i can't remember
2623720
It was in Sweet and Elite.
By the way, I'm getting the sinking feeling that Gilda is the one orchestrating these accidents.
2626414 yeah, that's the one i was thinking about, with the derby.
but i only said that about spitfire being the best as it's RD's view of idolising her
2626712 don't worry about foul play, this tale is about honesty
2628804
But the reason Rarity knew who would win was because she got that information from Rainbow Dash.
2629174 i know that, but i am simply making this story up on the spot. anyway, fics don't necessarily have to go off of the plot of official MLP episodes, it creates a bit of leeway for the author
I liked this chapter a lot to be honest. The whole emotion of it was just captured perfectly. Can't wait to see what happens next now that Dashie's been offered a position in the Wonderbolts.
Woah woe woe Woa!!!! Yaaaaay OMIGOWD I Luv did chapter!! Best ways to get into the wonderbolts. Too bad she died.
gilda?! oh gawd, i thought of everything else (even lightning dust) exept gilda hahha
oh..Oh OHHHWWAAAA omigosh, its like the rainbow dash and scootaloo as a indutee picture at the top of the page. haha
Yaaaaay~ Gilda! But I thought it was Best Pony (Lightning Dust, duh) for a second
GILDA
TELL ME WHAT YOU SAW
NAO, GILDA
SCOOTYYYYYYYYY!
D'awwwwwwwww,
That letter gave me diabeetus.
2648752 diabeetus
btw, did you enjoy this fic? i've not really had much feedback
2648761 It went a lil' fast in the beginning, but it was well worth it. The ending was incredible, though I was a little confused at the point in time the last chapter took place. Maybe I just derped (I did that a lot today. I had a french test and literally forget the entire language except for the word 'avons'.) and missed something, but you should take a look.
2648801 last chapter was a year after scoot's rejection
and i derp at french too
2648857 Oh. And there should be a group for people who derp at other languages.
awwww awww D'AWWWW AHHHHHG AWWWWZERS Ahhhghghghgdghu hurncgdwfjvi wordgasm
awwwwwwwwwNO...awwe. Im not loving the ending about about her quitting, but i live the little note
2649225 thanks for staying with this story!
2649259
This story seemed rushed and the pacing was slightly off.
i was wondering if you would allow me to possibly rewrite it. i would not change any of the main plot points, so it would still be the same story.
Your welcome to say no, but if you allow me to re-write it you would have the freedom to pre-read the chapters in advance, request to post it on your page and not mine, and almost any other request you want. I just feel the need to expand the story in order to improve the pacing.
all credit will be yours, and I will only get the credit for the rewritten portions.
send me a pm if you are interested in letting me do this, as well as your conditions/restrictions.
the PM you got is my writing and this comment is my friends version of it.