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Between Hallucinations and dreams, Spike's carnivorous dragon instincts start to arise and he tries to hide it from his friends. He is unsuccessful, as his will begins to falter.
Gore is for the first chapter but I doubt there will be any more.
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Nom nom nom on a slice of Fluttershy...
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2608273 so spike turned into a human and Twilight turned into sushi? Rarity might be some *exquisite* French thing,
, Pinkie would DEFINITELY be a sweet 
uhhhh thats all I can think of...anyone know more?
Well I don't have much to say on this story. It's an interesting idea and you didn't do badly with it at all. I honestly didn't like the story much, but that's no fault of yours. There is no such thing as a bad story after all, stories are either well written or poorly written and this is fairly well written. I would like a little bit more elaboration on setting in the beginning and make the dialogue a little clearer, and don't be afraid to describe characters that everyone already knows the look of, it makes the writing better.
All in all, good story, i give it a 7.5 out of 10 for good writing. Hope to see this story again later!
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Thanks I'll probably edit it some with those comments in mind. Dialogue isn't easy for me. If you didn't like it that's fine, to each their own.
This should be deliously interesting. Think it needs a comedy and dark tag though.
And no that want scare people off.
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K probably right.
If the craving of meat gets too strong theres other alternatives like fish.
dat scene
Hooves are for shaking, not for baking.
It's Twilight Sparkle, not Twilight with sprinkles.
It is improper to add a Dash of Fluttershy to your Cup Cake.
There's a difference between eating a caesar salad and eating Caesar.
It updated, Yay!
Had some capitalization errors towards the end but not bad.
Don't think the 'sex' tag will be necessary but you could make it look like that's his intention on other mare later.
We know what he really wants, and it's not to rut them
. Well, not all of them anyway.
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Yeah I have a problem adding too many capitals. I still haven't got that out of my system since elementary school.
Well you can never be too careful on this site. I don't want to freak people out.
Trust me, adding sex would be the least of your worry on this site.
Wanting to eat your friends who just happen to be sexy and delicious. That will freak so people out.
And with that gore tag there, I'm guessing Spike is going to get somepony sooner or later.
Well, I'm surpried to see you back.
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Hopefully I can be back more often. I do have lots of ideas.
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Well that makes me want to watch those movies again...
That's kinda out of place
Yay! Lunch Time!
And welcome back!
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Spike's dream came true (except he got a mouthful of Rainbow's painful hoof rather than Rainbow herself
)
Oh boy... Spike has tasted pony flesh!
But has Rainbow knocked the craving out of him? And what will the ponies do next?
Damn, that was perfect lying right there, way to go Spike!
I think there should be some space there. It almost sounds like Twilight was the one that killed her.
Poor Spike... He now thinks he has killed Pinkie Pie and is fleeing for the Everfree Forest. Will the forest be enough to keep his friends safe from his cravings? Is there any hope of a cure or remedy?
...for that cover art alone you get an up vote it's just...
...so
...darn
...CUTE!
Yay. More hungry moments with, Spike! Sad that he got the wrong idea but now we got some more drama for the story.
Looking forward to more. Hopefully soon!
You know for a second there, with the second chapter, I thought this was gonna be weird. But the last two chapters are pretty cool, some punctuation is a bit wonky but hey, it's good
Also
Pinkie was indeed. In fact, she always will be. All hail the Pinkie! (And I love that hilarious line after he bit her)
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