Somepony once asked the Great and Powerful Trixie why she travels: "To show you all how great I am, of course."
The real answer, naturally, isn't that simple. What would drive a pony to travel the world, spouting her greatness? Meet the pony Trixie was before she donned the hat and cape and catch a glimpse of the pony she couldn't be.
Submission for EQD Trixie Fanfic Event, May 2013.
Cover Image Credits (all from Deviant Art):
Ponyville BG - the crusius
Trixie's Wagon - moongazeponies
Adult Trixie - tygerbug
Filly Trixie - kurok
Pony Font from EQD
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This is an extremely captivating origin story. I love it. It doesn't mesh too well with canon - she's extremely powerful as a filly with only basic training, whereas canon adult Trixie is mostly good at stage tricks and performance - but it's nonetheless heartening and enjoyable.
I also hate her parents now. There's only so far you can take your bigotry, and tormenting your child for not having been born to your standards is way too far. Moondancer could probably have gotten her away from the Digglers just by contacting the Foal Protection Services - some of those things they did count as psychological abuse. To say nothing of the physical abuse. (Yes, just once, but... two days?!) You clearly wrote them to be obviously dislikeable, and you succeeded.
Disregarding her elevated power levels, I could happily accept this as a potential origin story for her. On the other hand, I'd love to see a story sometime where Trixie really is as powerful as she claims, just to see the reactions when she handily throws the starbeast back into the forest without breaking a sweat. ("What? That was just an Ursa Minor, they're even easier to handle than the Ursa Majors. Trixie said she was great and powerful.")
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Wow, thanks for the in-depth feedback. I'm glad to hear that you enjoyed it so much.
This may sound funny for a 5500 word story, but I was pretty constrained working under a strict time and word limit for the fanfic event: Trixie's seemingly higher power level (I was operating under the assumption that her boasting wasn't entirely empty, even though she does only have one great feat in the story proper), her parents' hatred of unicorns, Trixie's life after setting out on her own, and Moondancer's lack of more direct intervention are all things that got left on the cutting room floor. My main goal of the story was to explore just what kind of circumstances could churn out a pony that's as unfriendly, boastful, and vengeful as Trixie was in the show.
At some point, I'd like to come back and expand on some of those things, especially the ending. Knowing that there's somepony out there that would probably enjoy reading it is definitely some good incentive: thanks again for the great comment and all of the thought you put into the story as you read it!
(Also, as a fun fact Trixie's parents are the only original characters in the story; Moondancer is actually based on her G1 incarnation.)
Okay, let me give it to you sttaight. The story is great, in fact I think it needs more views and likes, but the group is about Trixie moving past her obsession with Twilight, although I do commend you. Unfortunately the story doesn't exact fit the group's criteria. If it's any consolation, I would have given this a yes.
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Fair enough; I guess I misunderstood a few things about the group. Thanks for the time and comment.
i cried manly tears
I loved this story.
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It's just liquid pride, right? I'm glad you enjoyed it so much.
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It makes me happy to hear that folks are enjoying this one. Thanks for taking the time to comment.
The first few paragraphs could just as easily describe Spike's earliest years. One of these days, I'm gonna ship those two.
This is, as Mooncalf said, an extremely captivating origin story. Seeing the dialogue and narrative language start small before rising to a normal level of sophistication worked well to give an impression of Trixie's development from filly to young mare. Every other element you worked in fit perfectly with canon; the two freshest in my mind were her childhood taking place on a farm and her idealistic dream of being a storybook hero. It was even mentioned by Lauren Faust that Twilight and Trixie were in the same class in the same school. That's the only thing here (besides an adult Moondancer) that clashes with canon: Twilight was about five or six when she was accepted, but Trixie was probably ten or eleven in this story. The feelings throughout were gripping, especially when she discovered that she had an uncle who wrote a children's book about her.
It was a pretty good tale about how potential cannot, or should not, be repressed. The Digglers' poor parenting not only damaged their kid but came back to bite them in the asses. Karma, meet the Diggler family. Diggler family, meet karma.
EDIT: Just read the rest of Mooncalf's comment. He's right, Trixie was a little OP. Guess I missed it because I love the idea of Trixie being genuinely powerful.
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I usually stick to show canon, but I had no idea it went that deep (as far as Trixie being in Twi's class and all that). It's always interesting to see what sort of assumptions people make when they read a story or how they interpret characters or events.
Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed so much and thanks a bunch for such an in-depth comment.
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You can say she was a lil op but think about how her emotions might have played on the whole thing. Emotions are a powerful thing. They coulda supercharged her from the moment she called herself Trixie.
This is awesome. One of the best "Trixie" origins.
I love this story so much! The fact that Trixie is too powerful makes me like it even more! If she was in Celestia's School for Gifted Unicorns, she must be powerful. You know what I think? I think a lot of people think Trixie is weak because they don't like her. Fanon Trixie is weak. I'm writing a story that got good comments; at least until Trixie appeared to fight and a lot of people complained that she was 'too OP'. Well, I like powerful Trixie. You story is great and I love it.
Also, I really love your story.
You can has review!