(A/N Go easy on this story please. I've decided to make this when my other story sucked blopzoids and I had to delete it.Also, i only made caramel and flitter kiss cause i didn't want to steal part of a dude's plot in his story.)
You walk in.
You see them.
"IT'S OVER"
you should make the chapters a bit longer you could have put the first and second chapter together
other then that it was great
2528641 Thanks man. I'll see what i can do
I'm liking this so far, It's a nice little story and I hope it keeps going
And I'm the first guy to favorite this? BOO YA
2537701 Wow! Thanks so much man for liking this and favoriting this. It means A LOT. Thanks.
I just realized
"Westside of Fillydelphia"
(sorry but I have to do this)
West Fillydelphia, born and raised, on the playground is where i spend most of my days
2542519 Nice! Haven't really thought of that!
COOL!! It's a nice start, Keep writing ^_^
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i dont think i was supposed to get the password
2567216 Wat?
2567506 wellllllll when i checked my feed i found out the new chapter came out so i clicked it but i needed a password so i tried to figure it out and well it kinda worked
2567751 Oh.
No offense but you really need to make these chapter longer. I was a little disappointed when I saw the number of words
2570530 None taken. Jus' that i'm just going through a hard time right now. My dad's in the hospital, my mom won't stop nagging me, school is getting even harder for me etc. I'm gonna see if I can try to extend this one chapter on the weekend.
Its short and rushed, sorry.
But hey! Its not bad, storywise
2649373Thanks man. I know it's rushed and I'm looking for a way to stop that. Thanks for the like and fav!
wow back up there
why is your father in the hospital if you don't mind telling me
2792404He got gout. He is now in rehabilitation and starting to walk again.
I got an idea for ya'
So... Rainbow Dash likes Darkflare or "you" right? If so what if Flare keeps friendzoning her, since he just got out of a relationship and all
2805600Sounds grea, but i'ma wait for som more ideas. Yours is great, but i'ma wait.
So... when are we going to see the next chapter?
3460246As soon as i.....well...i guess i could start the new chapter on the Wii U.....yep!