702975 Hmm. I really liked the idea of your story, (which, obviously is why I fav'd ) but I thought that, especially in the first chapter, the pacing was just a little rushed. That's really the only major thing I found, so fixing that and maybe getting an editor to just glance over your chapters before you publish them would make this story totally awesome.
I'm very curious to see where you go with this, and I hope the next chapter's up soon!
Hey, ya know what the best part writing Children of a Lesser Dragon God Boy Whelp Thingy Guy is? Getting to come and thank all the great folks like you who Faved it!
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Oh, Sun Dancer? Sorry that I'm so late to say this, but thank you for faving Daring Do and the Relic of the Four! I appreciate it!
703004 I'm not amazing enough to have an editor.
702975
Hmm. I really liked the idea of your story, (which, obviously is why I fav'd )
but I thought that, especially in the first chapter, the pacing was just a little rushed. That's really the only major thing I found, so fixing that and maybe getting an editor to just glance over your chapters before you publish them would make this story totally awesome.
I'm very curious to see where you go with this, and I hope the next chapter's up soon!
Thanks for the favorite!
May I ask what you liked or disliked in particular?
:D
Hey, ya know what the best part writing Children of a Lesser Dragon God Boy Whelp Thingy Guy is? Getting to come and thank all the great folks like you who Faved it!