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I just thought I'd introduce yourself. Darth Wrex, Sith Lord. What do I call you, my friend?

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Hey, how's it going? How can I help you?

Hello.

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I cannot begin to thank you enough for such an insightful and detailed critique! It is very much appreciated!

Not a problem at all! Just remember to take both sides of critique (positive and negative) to heart. Recognizing and capitalizing on one's strengths is just as valid a means for growth.

I'd started this week doing a major/minor overhaul of the story, with a focus on the very points you've mentioned. I look back on my earlier chapters and, well... Much like Twilight herself, I don't think I'll ever be completely satisfied.

I noticed you were working on that update. Very exciting! Perhaps I'll hold off on reading the whole thing until afterward, so I can approach it all as fresh as possible. And I'd be happy to further critique as needed. Also, nothing wrong with being like Twilight - her perseverance is always admirable.

If you can give me until I get all the chapters edited/updated, I'll be happy to do so. I'm about half-way finished, so it shouldn't take much longer. And it was, indeed, a pleasure speaking with you, and I look forwards to doing so again!

Take all the time you need. I look forward to your impressions, and speaking further on our writings as well!

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I cannot begin to thank you enough for such an insightful and detailed critique! It is very much appreciated!

As far as constructive criticism goes, I'd say the only real issues I've noticed at the moment are ones relating to sentence structure. A missing comma, the lack of certain contractions, reiterating words or sentiments that could be better summarized with a pronoun or a slight change in wording. Minor stuff like that, which again I'm sure has gotten better with experience.

I'd started this week doing a major/minor overhaul of the story, with a focus on the very points you've mentioned. I look back on my earlier chapters and, well... Much like Twilight herself, I don't think I'll ever be completely satisfied.

I'd be happy to comment more once I've read up to the current chapter, as well as elaborate on anything I've said further, if you wish.

Should you wish to do so, I would be quite pleased.

Incidentally, from one aspiring writer to another, I'd also appreciate opinions/comments on my story (as well as possible ideas). One way or another, though, thank you for reaching out. It was a pleasure to speak with you.

If you can give me until I get all the chapters edited/updated, I'll be happy to do so. I'm about half-way finished, so it shouldn't take much longer. And it was, indeed, a pleasure speaking with you, and I look forwards to doing so again!

~Masterius