A short thing I thought up. Haven't done any work in the fic business for a while so don't expect gold lol

A thief embarks on a heist to steal and airship that he had spent months planning on. This is the story of how his perfect heist took a turn for the worst, landing him somewhere he doesn't know and having no clue how it happened. What will happen? Well don't ask me read the story. Also, this is steampunk.

A Nice little intro to the fic: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GYTgTk-ZQZ8

Revan makes the decision to save himself using Fold Space, a force ability which allows the user to teleport an object from one place to another. This is the story of the end of his life.

This will also be a 3rd person story limited POV, since imo they are the easiest to write. It will focus entirely around Revan and his conversations with ponies, and maybe spike.

Feel free to give criticism, for this is my first story...well ever. Also if you want to make a better story out of this yourself, you have my go ahead to do so! :D But seriously, tell me where I go wrong and I will try my hardest to make it better for you, the reader.

Oh image URL if ya want it http://www.deviantart.com/download/101368907/DARTH_REVAN_by_Unclesatan.png

Also here is some information about Revan http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rVQe58FjMqQ
Admiral Hackett narrating these things is just awesome.