Epilogue
It's been fifteen years since Dash died. I've married a Unicorn named Janine. We have two kids (Both Unicorns). I've also destroyed the organization. My brother and I hunted them down and killed all of them.
I'm not very good at conclusions and the like, so I just quoted some lines from an old song called Simple Gifts. I think they kind of describes Dash, because none of these things happened to her.
To be simple, 'tis a find gift to be simple, and to be free. To be happy, and simple, is where you ought to be.
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Sadfic is sad...
When I was reading the description I lost my shit when I saw the whole gang rape thing XD
Right now, I would be willing to lay down my life just so she could get a second chance. Alternatively, go grab a quick revive, go back to after the brutal murdering, and force her to drink it. Some bastards have no thought for others
199254
Yeah, I myself was just trying to write a sad fanfic. I was trying to make it lengthy, but not too much, so I just had time to do the story and whatnot
199520
Well unfortunately if you don't develop your characters and make the readers feel a real attachment to them, then we really don't feel any emotional loss when they die or leave or some other literary method that removes them from a story. At any rate each paragraph in this story really needed to be expanded into about 4 paragraphs. I felt more like i was reading an outline than I was a story, If you are looking to revise this story message me and I can help point you in a direction.
199847 Yeah, I kinda felt that way, as well. I was just trying to finish fast so my friend and I could write one together, because this took up a ton of time.
good fic, could'a been better. if you rewrote it, it'd prolly be a bunch better. lol i just stumbled on this fic and decided "hmm this guy sounds like he has balls." was totally right tho.
P.S. first time trying to write a sad fic? was pretty dang good. seemed like it was being told as a memory. kinda like the cutscenes in "the darkness"
208721 Thanks, dude.
234748 The thing with the wind making it unflyable was because it was a gale... It said that... In the text...
199149 Not to be stupid or anything, but... Drink what?
236037 Quick revive is a drink. you can find it in cod black ops zombies. so you force her to drink that, then she quickly revives, and everyone not dead is happy
239182 But that would destroy the story... The entire point is that things move on, but he never stops loving Dash...
However, I could possibly do a sequel of sorts... Maybe about when the ponies first entered through the portal?
234748 Oh, and... It's spelled description. Not discription. Pay attention to squiggly red lines.
242528 Do so... Or I will get Chuck Norris to pay u a little visit heheheheheehehehehehe.
Very good in my opinion as many others have stated it is a bit short but no major derps
296862 Yeah, I'm considering taking it down and re-writing it. What do you think?
300081 It couldn't hurt but if you change the story already written then it won't be near as good.
so don't change the story other than the length.
This is a really great story!
I have absoulutely no complaints for this.
Wish I could review, like you did.
But I'm a really bad reviewer.
Kthxbai.
...
P.S. Did this get feautured cause It should be.
317168 No, it didn't get featured, but it got 250 of its 558 total views in an hour, so I suppose that counts. Thanks, by the way. I read back over it and found loads of spelling/grammar mistakes, and also that it is, indeed, rushed. I could have been way more descriptive when it came down to it.
THUMBS! THUMBS!THUMBS...UP!
710160 Yeah... This is my first fic ever, so sorry about the pacing and grammar issues. I'd never reall written before this, so yeah.
And btw, you ever read Ponyfall stuff? I published this a few days before Ponyfall started, and it has the same premise - Ponie sent to Earth via a portal made by Discord. So, yeah. Draequine and I must be telepathically linked.
I like how you left it open. Perhaps write a fic about hunting down said organization? That would be awesome, in a way I guess.
710285 Maybe. I've only gotten three requests for writing more. I'm probably gonna leave it untouched.
199254 New fag.