A Perfect Key
Chapter 1.
By Jonnydash
The ever growing sound of that all too familiar beeping jolts me from my dreamy wonderland. I was in the middle of enjoying the most satisfying and tasty club sandwich, when my alarm clock had gone off and snapped me out of it. I quickly realized that the sandwich from my dream had been half of my pillowcase. I spat out the case and sat up in my soft mattress and sleepily looked about my room. It was a quaint room full of odds and ends from my life, posters of bands hung on the wall, a 40 inch TV displayed across the room and my desktop sat in the far corner. I flipped on the light on the nightstand beside my bed and rubbed my eyes to wake myself up.
I proceeded to walk almost stumbling out of my bedroom and down the hall to the bathroom to start my morning ritual. After putting in my contacts and taking a long hot shower I stepped out into the laundry room to pick up my work clothes. After putting on the shop uniform and placing mechanics nametag on I proceeded back towards my room down the hallway. Out of the corner of my eye I catch the hint of a silver sparkle rested just underneath the low end table. Not knowing what it is I bent down to pick it up and noticed it was an old style skeleton key. The key had a tarnished silver coat to it and black smudges all around the very ornate head. At the end were two small jetted out teeth and a short almost box jetted edge to it. Looking at the key I wanted to find out where it came from and why it was in my house in the first place. I racked my brain over and over trying to find answers to this question and I couldn’t find any sort of reasonable answer. I shrugged and said to myself “eh, I must have forgotten about it or something.” I continued to my room and sat in my comfy computer chair to check my e-mails and messages. I stared at my applejack wallpaper for a second before opening my emails and going through the mountains of spam I normally receive.
The first e-mail I stopped my cursor on was sent from an unknown source and was titled “Hello Jonnydash.” I opened it thinking it was just another one of those spam mails and send to so many people for a such and such, but this seemed to be different and I couldn’t place my finger on it. I figured it was the use of my screen name, since I only used it for my little pony things and cursing about the fandom. Maybe Austin had sent me some sort of e-mail on our next project. I read the e-mail out loud “Jonnydash, I sent you the key, instructions are within.” I had no clue what it was talking about and figured it was a spam message and moved on. Having nothing left in my e-mail folder I remembered the crazy e-mail. I figured Austin was playing a joke on me so I pulled up Skype. Seeing he was online, I placed my cursor over the username “Austin673” and clicked the call button. It rang a happy tune for a few short seconds and an eager but obviously tired voice answered “what chu want jonny?”
“Well good morning to you too sunshine” I said almost chuckling.
“Oh shut up” he laughed, “But seriously it’s like 8 o’clock in the morning there right? So what’s up?” he responded.
“Well yes it is, I just had a question for ya.”
“Shoot” he said simply.
“I got a weird e-mail about some key and instructions I just wanted to know if you sent it.”
“Nope I sure didn’t dude but it sounds like someone is playing a joke on you.” He responded obviously trying to hold back from laughing.
“Alright man well I just wanted to be sure, I gotta get going to work though bro and I’ll catch ya later.” I said.
He responded with a “peace” and the Skype ending call tone. I gathered up my jacket and headed towards the door of my room still realizing I had the key in my pocket and thought about it for a second before reaching the door.
I placed my hand upon the knob and found it to be locked. “What the Heck?!” I stammered out, as I know my door can’t lock itself because it has no lock on it. I tried turning it again and again and looked down at the bottom of the door where a crack had started to form on it. The crack was small less than a few inches but it was not there before last night I knew that for sure. I realized this was not my normal door. It looked almost exactly like my old door but with a brighter white color to it. The knob was also different; it was a tarnished gold color with an old style hole for a key. Above the hole for the key was etched “inside you”. As I wondered what had happened to my old door I realized I still had the old style key in my pocket. I figured I’d try it and give it a shot; I wiped the black smudge off the face of the key revealing an etched and embroidered “E” on the face. I inserted the key into the hole and turned. I felt the tumblers fall and the door unlock with a loud thud that sounded almost too big for the door. I pushed it open and proceeded to take a step but I realized too late that what I was stepping into was pitch black and had no floor to step on. I blacked out as I felt a falling sensation and wind rush through my body slipping me into an unconscious state only to faintly hear the sounds of female voices talking about a “strange pony” before I blacked out completely.
Great Intro Can't Wait For More
If I found a strange key in my bedroom, received an anonymous email telling me what to do with the key, and discovered that someone had replaced my front door with one that matches the mysterious key perfectly, I'd be freaked the fuck out. I'd think someone was stalking me, or wanted to trap me in my house "Cask of Amontillado" style. Your character is either a ridiculously chill guy, mellow to the point of fault, or isn't freaked-out enough for the crazy stuff that's happening to him. All in all, though, I'd say this is a decent introduction.
Cool start!
I gotta admit that when I read the description and it said "inside you", I had some VERY weird thoughts
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sorry but i have to. "Watch out for that first step it's a doozy".
Very interesting, can't wait for more.
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yay thank you :)
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yay!!
"I proceeded to walk almost stumble out "
needs tweaked i think..
"I proceeded to walk and almost stumble out "
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"I proceeded to walk almost stumbling out "
Oh, so you put Austin in your story, but not me? Feels bad man...
But seriously, nice job on the first chapter, it's looking good so far!
Despite a few flaws, (that are more down to a lack of commas in areas) this is a good start!
I will eagerly read more of this.