After the Tardis makes an emergency landing on an uncharted planet, The Doctor in an effort to find a way of fixing it comes across a small town filled with multi colored, talking ponies. It's there that he meets a lavender unicorn pony named Twilight Sparkle and her five friends Rarity, Applejack, Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, and Fluttershy. Things seem peaceful at first until the Doctor discovers a plot from an old enemy to not just kill him but enslave the ponies of Equestria as well. It's up to the Doctor and his new friends to stop this from happening.
Chapters (2)
I like this story so far but there are a couple of things you need to fix. One is you need to put what the characters are saying in quotation marks (eg ") also when a new character talks that should be in a new paragraph. Beside those this story has a lot of potential.
QUOTATION MARKS. Please. Also, new paragraph whenever someone new speaks.
Gotcha and thanks for liking so far.
yeah seriously
Although there are some grammatical errors, this is vastly better than chapter one.
Holy crap, Tom Baker's face on that cover art creeps the shit out of me.
Bloody hell, my favorite doctor, in a cross-over fic? My attention increases! When, by chance, will you be updating? :3
Dude please finish this when you get the chance.
Please continue this
Enjoyable. Absolutely enjoyable. It was so pleasant on my silent reading sense that I could not and would not change anything about your rhythm and narrative signature. This is easily one of the best non-purple writing styles I've ever read. The only setbacks I see, which aren't even out of detriment to the flow or accessibility of your work, are punctuation errors.
Punctuation errors include not capitalizing the initial letter of proper nouns, using commas or semicolons and all that nonsense. If it were up to me, I'd say there was nothing wrong. But critics are critics and literary snobs will always exist. Unless Trump decides to blame them, too, anyway.
6405173 I'm not the best at grammar, but you should have seen what this story looked like originally.
I hope to see another chapter soon.^_^
Made a huge mistake in this chapter. I completely forgot about Spike! Now I have to edit the whole chapter. Which means certain parts of the chapter are going to be changed to include Spike more. Hope you guys won't mind.