You lure people in the the lovely premise of a small and surprisingly well written foal, that even I can follow for a bit why she is as she is, even if her place in life is so extreme.
And then do you add the evil plot! A evil and intriguing plot that kept me awake, already beginning to read this all to late, and now is the clock saying 4AM. I have read this in one setting, something that I don´t do so often when we are talking stories over 10K words.
You enthralled me in your well written words, your policy behind the walls of the castle, and with the curiosity to see what there would happen to a little foal... in more than one way must I admit.
I do almost think that it is sad that the sex scenes are here in details, because I think that it is scaring many people away from a not just a rather good story, but a shining pearl. But then again, it would not have the same impact as it haves without those scenes, because we would not understand her mind so well... As I have said before, you are a evil evil person!
A last thing I must say is bravo with the teller style. Normally does I lose my bigger picture if we are shifting between more than 2 characters view, and that is on a whole story. But you did sussed in writing in such a way that I wasn´t in doubt at any point in whose head we where in.
what would happen if fancy told or wrote to twi or luna about what tia has done lala and plans for her twi would hate tia ext. and if luna is not in on tia's plans for lala.
Mmmm, I can't wait! Will we be seeing a lot more of La petite indulge in her steamy sexual desires?
You are evil I say! Evil evil evil! Not just a little bit, but a whole lot, Pinkie show what there happened to me!
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You lure people in the the lovely premise of a small and surprisingly well written foal, that even I can follow for a bit why she is as she is, even if her place in life is so extreme.
And then do you add the evil plot! A evil and intriguing plot that kept me awake, already beginning to read this all to late, and now is the clock saying 4AM. I have read this in one setting, something that I don´t do so often when we are talking stories over 10K words.
You enthralled me in your well written words, your policy behind the walls of the castle, and with the curiosity to see what there would happen to a little foal... in more than one way must I admit.
I do almost think that it is sad that the sex scenes are here in details, because I think that it is scaring many people away from a not just a rather good story, but a shining pearl. But then again, it would not have the same impact as it haves without those scenes, because we would not understand her mind so well... As I have said before, you are a evil evil person!
A last thing I must say is bravo with the teller style. Normally does I lose my bigger picture if we are shifting between more than 2 characters view, and that is on a whole story. But you did sussed in writing in such a way that I wasn´t in doubt at any point in whose head we where in.
Good fiction I could say.
what would happen if fancy told or wrote to twi or luna about what tia has done lala and plans for her twi would hate tia ext. and if luna is not in on tia's plans for lala.
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just to clarify.
This is before episode one of season 1, celestia was the absolute ruler of Equestria and Twilight was just a foal and hadn't met celestia yet.
Fancy and Fleur are actually about a lil older than the mane 6's age at this point..
2543652 i musta missed that thanks good read thoue
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was going to clarify towards the end of the sequel.