• Member Since 7th Oct, 2012
  • offline last seen Oct 5th, 2013

Sky Blue Angel


Well, I am an intermediate writer, and I am currently drafting a few stories. I like to keep tabs on stories, which just means I like to both read and write.

Comments ( 14 )

thumbs up on this.:yay: i sortta cried i will admit that much:fluttercry: but over all it was good becuase i understand that you were rushed for time with this story :raritywink:

loved it....great story....good feels...just one little nitpick i have...

Her deep red eyes contrasted perfectly with her electric blue mane.

Her deep red eyes

red eyes

red

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her eyes are actually magenta......just thought you'd like to know that:moustache:

Hehehehe theys gonna get it on

2424583

I'm sorry! :applecry: I completely forgot DX

2425940
all good, i just felt like pointing that out....
and simply pointing something out is too.....normal*shudder*....for me, so i to make a big deal with the quotes and the image:scootangel:

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Ah. To make you feel better, I'll go fix everything :twilightsheepish:

What? That was nice, but it didn't make much sense. It kind of jumped around so I was feeling pretty jolted most of the time. Not bad.

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A lot of my one-shots tend to jump around a bit, considering that this was a competition between myself and some of my friends to see who would write the best story in the shortest amount of time.

But thanks for the feedback :twilightsmile:

I'm not ~living~ the english language:
How did they can say "Love you" if they just met? :twilightoops:

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Basically a run-down "Love at first sight" story. Not a very good one, though :ajsleepy:

2424583 WHY CAN I NOT STOP LAUGHING AT THE GIF!?!?

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cuz u love it.

.....Jesus Christ, this was a while ago when I read this.

There’s the potential for a good story here.

It’s just buried beneath the layers of atrocious pacing, bizarre dialogue and incomprehensible scene composition.

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